Treana Penn
Professor Sabir
March 27 2009
Stewart Pidd mistakenly uses a subjective case pronoun with a compound object. He states, “. . . Ditch wanted to come with Camper and I . . .” (1). There is not a preposition in front of “Camper and I”. The case rule for a preposition preceding a pronoun use the objective case if the pronoun follows a preposition. The pronoun “I” does not function as part of the subject. He can fix the error by replacing the subjective pronoun “I” with the correct case pronoun “me”. The correct sentence will read, “. . . Ditch wanted to come with Camper and me. . . .” (1).
Pidd does not use a case pronoun to modify an object. He states, “. . . After two of the generals attacked two of the hill drivers, Camper and I . . .” (1). The noun phrase “two of the hill drivers” functions as an object in the sentence. Pidd uses the case “ I” for the appositive that modifies the noun phrase. The pronoun used in an appositive does not have the same function as the noun it renames. He can correct the error by changing the pronoun “I” to the pronoun “me”. The correct sentence will read, “. . . After two of the Generals attacked two of the hill drivers, Camper and Me. . .” (1).
Pidd has trouble determining case with a comparison using the word “than”. He writes, “. . . Ditch was smarter than Camper and me. . .” (2). The key word that precedes the phrase “Camper and me” was, smarter. There is a comparison being made. The sentence does not make sense if Pidd finishes the sentence by writing, “me is”. Pidd can correct the sentence by using the subjective case pronouns for comparisons using than and as. The sentence will read, “. . . Ditch was smarter than Camper and I. . . .”.
Stewart misuses the objective pronoun “me” as a part of a compound subject. He states, “. . . Me and Camper laughed hard because Ditch is probably the dumbest of the Dents. . .” (2). The subject of the sentence is “Me and Camper”. When the pronoun is part of the subject., the writer should use a subjective case. If you isolate the pronoun you want to test, your ear will often tell you if the case is incorrect. Pidd can fix the error by replacing the compound subject “Me and Camper” with a compound object “Camper and I”. The revised sentence will read, “. . . Camper and I, laughed hard because Ditch is probably the Dumbest of the Dents. . .” (2).
Pidd chose the wrong pronoun for his subject compliment. He writes, “It was he who told Ranger Encantado that I could see why she was a former Ludville Bat Guano Bay Queen” (2). Pidd uses the
Pronoun “he” for the subject compliment. The pronoun rule for the subject complement is to use subjective case pronouns for subjective complements. Pidd used a subjective case pronoun for the subject compliment. He can fix the sentence by switching the subject with the subject compliment. The sentence will now read, “ It was him that told Ranger Encantado that I could see why she was a former Ludville Bat Guano Bay Queen. . . .” (2).
Stewart Pidd makes a comparison mistake using “than” by picking the wrong pronoun case. He writes, “. . . you are almost pretty as her. . .” (2). Pidd makes a comparison in the sentence. Pidd uses the word “as” to make his comparison. He can check for the correct case when using “as” by adding a verb after the pronoun to complete the comparison. The sentence would not make sense if Pidd finished the sentence with “as pretty as her is”. To correct the sentence Pidd can replace the subjective case “her” with the objective case pronoun “she”. The revised sentence will read, “. . . you are almost as pretty as she is. . .” (2).
Pidd uses the wrong pronoun case for an appositive modifying the subject. He writes, “. . . I think I am going to ask my Pa, Sid, if the Pidd Men, Sid and me. . .” (2). The appositive “Sid and me” is modifying a subject. The case rule for modifying subjects is to use the same case for compliments as the subjects they modify. Pidd can fix the error by using the subjective case if the pronoun is modifying a subject; otherwise use the objectives. The correct sentence will read, “. . . I think I am going to ask my Pa, Sid, if the Pidd Men, Sid and I. . . .” (2).
Friday, May 29, 2009
Stewart Pidd's Point of View Essay
Treana Penn
April 7, 2009
English 201B
From a Bad Point of View
Pollitt and Baker explain the basics of point of view: they define point of view as “the perspective from which one tells a story or writes an essay” (144). There is a specific way to control them, “The key to controlling point of view is choosing the correct pronoun.” (144). There are more than one type of point-of-views, “There are three point of views.” (144). Each perspective is useful for something; “The first-person point of view emphasizes the writer and is suitable for personal experience writing, the second-person point of view emphasizes the reader and is suitable for letters, and the third-person point of view places the emphasis on the subject and works best for academic writing.” (144-45). Unless instructed otherwise, “students should avoid the second-person point of view in academic writing.” (145). Writers should control their point of view, “Since so few college students can control point of view., maintaining consistency is an easy way to excel as a writer.” (144-45). He can easily fix the point-of-view shifts in his report “Ignacio Pistachio: Ludville’s Greatest Explorer”. Stewart Pidd should be able to maintain a consistence third-person point of view.
With a few minor changes, Pidd can shift his opening sentence from the first-person perspective to the third person: “we”. He states, “We all know that over two-hundred years ago Ludvilles’s greatest explorer, Ignacio Pistachio, fell off his ship. . . ” (1). Pidd misuses the first-person plural pronoun “we.” Pidd can take out the first independent clause “we all
know”. From there the remaining subordinating clause “that over. . .” can be changed into an independent by removing the subordinating conjunction “that”. The corrected sentence will read, “Over two hundred years ago Ludville’s greatest explorer, Ignacio Pistachio, fell off his ship.” (1).
Pidd can fix the next shift by simply replacing the pronoun with a plural noun. He writes, “What you don’t know is how he died.” (1). Pidd misuses the second -person pronoun “you.” Pidd can fix the error by replacing the second-person pronoun “you” with an appropriate noun “people”. The correct sentence will read “What they don’t know he is how he died” (1).
Pidd can fix his last second-person point-of-view shift , which comes in the form of an imperative. He says, “Consider this: Being lost in the primordial California wilderness did nothing to soften Pistachio’s disposition or sate his great appetite.” (2). In this paragraph, Pidd gives a command. The command Pidd gives, “consider this. . .”. In the sentence “consider this…” “you” is being implied. Pidd can fix the point of view by omitting the
imperative and replacing the implied “you” with a noun followed by the modal verb “should”. The correct sentence will read “Readers should consider this:…” (2).
Pidd can fix his first-person singular and plural point-of-view shifts by omitting the first pronoun, replacing the second pronoun and changing the question into a statement. He writes, “I wonder, should our children really be taught to celebrate such an exploitative kook?” (2). Pidd misuses the pronouns “I” and “our”. Pidd can fix the point of view shift by eliminating the first-person pronoun “I” by eliminating the independent clause “I wonder” and replace the possessive pronoun “our” with a possessive noun “Ludville’s”. Ludvile’s children should not be taught to celebrate such an exploitative kook.
Stewart Pidd should be able to maintain a consistence third-person point of view.
Pollitt and Baker explain the basics of point of view: they view a point of view as “the perspective from which one tells a story or writes an essay” (144). There is a specific way to control them, “The key to controlling point of view is choosing the correct pronoun.” (144). There are more than one type of point-of-views, “There are three point of views.” (144). Each perspective is useful for something; “The first-person point of view emphasizes the writer and is suitable for personal experience writing, the second-person point of view emphasizes the reader and is suitable for letters, and the third-person point of view places the emphasis on the subject and works best for academic writing.” (144-45). Unless instructed otherwise, “students should avoid the second-person point of view in academic writing.” (145). Writers should control their point of view, “Since so few college students can control point of view., maintaining consistency is an easy way to excel as a writer.” (144-45). He can easily fix the point-of-view shifts in his report “Ignacio Pistachio: Ludville’s Greatest Explorer”.
As Aldous Huxley says. “The only completely consistent people are completely dead”. If what Huxley says is true. Pidd is very much alive. Therefore, consistency is a rare thing among the living. Point-of-view consistency is a rare thing among beginning writers. Maintaining consistent point of view is an easy way to separate oneself from other writers. With the scarcity of consistency, writers should strive to stay with only one type of point-of-view, such as first person.
April 7, 2009
English 201B
From a Bad Point of View
Pollitt and Baker explain the basics of point of view: they define point of view as “the perspective from which one tells a story or writes an essay” (144). There is a specific way to control them, “The key to controlling point of view is choosing the correct pronoun.” (144). There are more than one type of point-of-views, “There are three point of views.” (144). Each perspective is useful for something; “The first-person point of view emphasizes the writer and is suitable for personal experience writing, the second-person point of view emphasizes the reader and is suitable for letters, and the third-person point of view places the emphasis on the subject and works best for academic writing.” (144-45). Unless instructed otherwise, “students should avoid the second-person point of view in academic writing.” (145). Writers should control their point of view, “Since so few college students can control point of view., maintaining consistency is an easy way to excel as a writer.” (144-45). He can easily fix the point-of-view shifts in his report “Ignacio Pistachio: Ludville’s Greatest Explorer”. Stewart Pidd should be able to maintain a consistence third-person point of view.
With a few minor changes, Pidd can shift his opening sentence from the first-person perspective to the third person: “we”. He states, “We all know that over two-hundred years ago Ludvilles’s greatest explorer, Ignacio Pistachio, fell off his ship. . . ” (1). Pidd misuses the first-person plural pronoun “we.” Pidd can take out the first independent clause “we all
know”. From there the remaining subordinating clause “that over. . .” can be changed into an independent by removing the subordinating conjunction “that”. The corrected sentence will read, “Over two hundred years ago Ludville’s greatest explorer, Ignacio Pistachio, fell off his ship.” (1).
Pidd can fix the next shift by simply replacing the pronoun with a plural noun. He writes, “What you don’t know is how he died.” (1). Pidd misuses the second -person pronoun “you.” Pidd can fix the error by replacing the second-person pronoun “you” with an appropriate noun “people”. The correct sentence will read “What they don’t know he is how he died” (1).
Pidd can fix his last second-person point-of-view shift , which comes in the form of an imperative. He says, “Consider this: Being lost in the primordial California wilderness did nothing to soften Pistachio’s disposition or sate his great appetite.” (2). In this paragraph, Pidd gives a command. The command Pidd gives, “consider this. . .”. In the sentence “consider this…” “you” is being implied. Pidd can fix the point of view by omitting the
imperative and replacing the implied “you” with a noun followed by the modal verb “should”. The correct sentence will read “Readers should consider this:…” (2).
Pidd can fix his first-person singular and plural point-of-view shifts by omitting the first pronoun, replacing the second pronoun and changing the question into a statement. He writes, “I wonder, should our children really be taught to celebrate such an exploitative kook?” (2). Pidd misuses the pronouns “I” and “our”. Pidd can fix the point of view shift by eliminating the first-person pronoun “I” by eliminating the independent clause “I wonder” and replace the possessive pronoun “our” with a possessive noun “Ludville’s”. Ludvile’s children should not be taught to celebrate such an exploitative kook.
Stewart Pidd should be able to maintain a consistence third-person point of view.
Pollitt and Baker explain the basics of point of view: they view a point of view as “the perspective from which one tells a story or writes an essay” (144). There is a specific way to control them, “The key to controlling point of view is choosing the correct pronoun.” (144). There are more than one type of point-of-views, “There are three point of views.” (144). Each perspective is useful for something; “The first-person point of view emphasizes the writer and is suitable for personal experience writing, the second-person point of view emphasizes the reader and is suitable for letters, and the third-person point of view places the emphasis on the subject and works best for academic writing.” (144-45). Unless instructed otherwise, “students should avoid the second-person point of view in academic writing.” (145). Writers should control their point of view, “Since so few college students can control point of view., maintaining consistency is an easy way to excel as a writer.” (144-45). He can easily fix the point-of-view shifts in his report “Ignacio Pistachio: Ludville’s Greatest Explorer”.
As Aldous Huxley says. “The only completely consistent people are completely dead”. If what Huxley says is true. Pidd is very much alive. Therefore, consistency is a rare thing among the living. Point-of-view consistency is a rare thing among beginning writers. Maintaining consistent point of view is an easy way to separate oneself from other writers. With the scarcity of consistency, writers should strive to stay with only one type of point-of-view, such as first person.
Stewart Pidd's Puctuation Essay
Treana Penn
Professor Sabir
English 201B
21 February 2009
Skating Through Pidd’s Bad Punctuations
In order to punctuate sentences correctly writers must understand certain rules and concepts. A clause is a group of words, containing a subject and a predicate, making a complete sentence. There are two types of clauses a subordinate clause and an independent clause. The difference between an independent clause and a subordinate clause, is that only an independent clause can stand alone. A phrase is a group of words not containing both a subject and a verb. Three comma sentence punctuation errors are comma splices, run-on sentences and fragment sentences. A fragment is not a phrase or a subordinate clause punctuated as a sentence. When a word group containing two or more independent clauses without a proper punctuation separating them, they are called a run-on sentence. A comma splice is a punctuation error that consist of two independent clauses punctuated with only a comma. Stewart Pidd deserves a “D” on his paper “Skating Rules” , because he does not properly punctuate his sentences.
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. He writes, “ Skating rules and I rock.” The mistake occurs between the words “rules” and “and.” Pidd has failed to punctuate two independent clauses. “Skating rules” and “I rock”, joined together with a coordinating conjunction. He can ix this error by separating the two independent clauses. He can add a comma after the first independent clause or replace the coordinating conjunction with a semicolon or a period.
Pidd makes a sentence fragment error. He writes, “If I skate. I win.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “If I skate. I win” with only a comma. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into a subordinate clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction “If.”
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes, “His little step-by-step system for learning” as a sentence. He can fix this error by connecting the phrase to a nearby sentence with a comma. Pidd must make the phrase a subject and add a predicate to convert the phrase.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes, “When he canters out to his corvette”. Pidd punctuates the subordinating clause “when he canters out to his corvette” with only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction “when.”
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. He writes “I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it, into one of his low-profile tires.” The mistake occurs between the words “arrow” and “I”. Pidd has failed to punctuate two independent clauses “I found this stick arrowhead” and “It will stick it into one of his low-profile tires.” He can fix this error by separating the two independent clauses to separate the two clauses he can by adding a comma after the first independent clauses.
Stewart Pidd deserves a “D” on his paper “Skating Rules” because he makes many sentence punctuation errors. Pidd’s failure to correctly punctuate sentences is the reason why he does not deserve a passing grade. Instead of making fun of Coach T’s lame English class, Pidd should follow Coach T’s little step-by-step system for learning. Throughout Pidd’s paper, he did not correctly punctuate his paper costing him a failing grade.
Professor Sabir
English 201B
21 February 2009
Skating Through Pidd’s Bad Punctuations
In order to punctuate sentences correctly writers must understand certain rules and concepts. A clause is a group of words, containing a subject and a predicate, making a complete sentence. There are two types of clauses a subordinate clause and an independent clause. The difference between an independent clause and a subordinate clause, is that only an independent clause can stand alone. A phrase is a group of words not containing both a subject and a verb. Three comma sentence punctuation errors are comma splices, run-on sentences and fragment sentences. A fragment is not a phrase or a subordinate clause punctuated as a sentence. When a word group containing two or more independent clauses without a proper punctuation separating them, they are called a run-on sentence. A comma splice is a punctuation error that consist of two independent clauses punctuated with only a comma. Stewart Pidd deserves a “D” on his paper “Skating Rules” , because he does not properly punctuate his sentences.
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. He writes, “ Skating rules and I rock.” The mistake occurs between the words “rules” and “and.” Pidd has failed to punctuate two independent clauses. “Skating rules” and “I rock”, joined together with a coordinating conjunction. He can ix this error by separating the two independent clauses. He can add a comma after the first independent clause or replace the coordinating conjunction with a semicolon or a period.
Pidd makes a sentence fragment error. He writes, “If I skate. I win.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “If I skate. I win” with only a comma. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into a subordinate clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction “If.”
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes, “His little step-by-step system for learning” as a sentence. He can fix this error by connecting the phrase to a nearby sentence with a comma. Pidd must make the phrase a subject and add a predicate to convert the phrase.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes, “When he canters out to his corvette”. Pidd punctuates the subordinating clause “when he canters out to his corvette” with only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction “when.”
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. He writes “I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it, into one of his low-profile tires.” The mistake occurs between the words “arrow” and “I”. Pidd has failed to punctuate two independent clauses “I found this stick arrowhead” and “It will stick it into one of his low-profile tires.” He can fix this error by separating the two independent clauses to separate the two clauses he can by adding a comma after the first independent clauses.
Stewart Pidd deserves a “D” on his paper “Skating Rules” because he makes many sentence punctuation errors. Pidd’s failure to correctly punctuate sentences is the reason why he does not deserve a passing grade. Instead of making fun of Coach T’s lame English class, Pidd should follow Coach T’s little step-by-step system for learning. Throughout Pidd’s paper, he did not correctly punctuate his paper costing him a failing grade.
DREAMS FROM MY FATHER VOCAB
Barack Obama: Dreams From My Father Vocabulary Words
chapter 1
1) Gaunt (adj): extremely thin and bony
2) Pali (n): (in Hawaii) a steep slope or cliff
3) Bequeathed (v): to hand down; pass on
4) Miscegenation (n): interbreeding between members of different races
5) Sinewy (adj): of or like sinews; tough, firm, braided, or resilient
6) Octoroon (n): a person having one-eighth black ancestry; the offspring of a quadroon and a white
7) Mirthless (adj): devoid of gladness
8) Puffery (n): exaggerated phrase
chapter 2
1) Jitneys (n): a small bus or car following a regular route along which it picks up and discharges passengers, originally charging each passenger five cents
2) Wiry (adj): in the form of wire
3) Petered (v): To become exhausted
4) Animist (n): the belief that natural objects, natural phenomena, and the universe itself possess souls
5) Demagogue (n): a person, esp. an orator or political leader, who gains power and popularity by arousing the emotions, passions, and prejudices of the people
6) Dysentery (n): diarrhea
7) Rebuff (n): a blunt or abrupt rejection, as of a person making advances
Chapter 3
1) Hoarding: a temporary board fence put about a building being erected or repaired —called also hoard
2) Menacing: to make a show of intention to harm
3) Convergence: the merging of distinct technologies, industries, or devices into a unified whole
4) Reprimand: a severe or formal reproof
5) Cannibalism: the usually ritualistic eating of human flesh by a human being
6) Unearthed: to dig up out of or as if out of the earth
Chapter 5 &6
1)Warbling: to sing in a trilling manner or with many turns and variations
2) Moralism: an often exaggerated emphasis on morality
3) Incurable: not likely to be changed or corrected
4) Cesspool: an underground reservoir for liquid waste (as household sewage)
5) Paramilitary: relating to, being, or characteristic of a force formed on a military pattern
6) Servitude: a condition in which one lacks liberty especially to determine one's course of action or way of life
7) Waffling: to talk or write foolishly
8) Eloquent: marked by forceful and fluent expression
9) Homilies: a usually short sermon
10) Expedient: suitable for achieving a particular end in a given circumstance
11) Unanchored: not having a firm basis or foundation
12) Reefer: one that reefs
13) Bile: inclination to anger
14) Tenements: a house used as a dwelling
15) Monsoons: rainfall that is associated with the monsoon
16) Guileless: innocent
Chapter 7
1) Intermittently: coming and going at intervals : not continuous
2) Debris: the remains of something broken down or destroyed
3) Trodden: to walk or proceed along
4) Perpetual: continuing forever
5) Promenade: to walk about in or on
6) Moorings: an act of making fast a boat or aircraft with lines or anchors
7) Grizzled: sprinkled or streaked with gray
8) Hemorrhage: a copious discharge of blood from the blood vessels
9) Indeterminate: having an infinite number of solution
10) Boisterous: marked by or expressive of exuberance and high spirits
11) Bespoke: dealing in or producing custom-made articles
12) Alderman: a person governing a kingdom, district, or shire as viceroy for an Anglo-Saxon king
13) Archdiocese: the diocese of an archbishop
14) Desolation: barren wasteland
Chapter 8
1) Solemn: marked by the invocation of a religious sanction
2) Sustain: to give support or relief to
3) Subcompact: an automobile smaller than a compact
4) Leaflet: one of the divisions of a compound leaf
5) Betel nut: the astringent seed of the betel palm
6) Obsolete: no longer in use or no longer useful
7) Elongated: to extend the length of
Chapter 9
1) Botched: to put together in a makeshift way
2) Assortment: a collection of assorted things or persons
3) Pry: to look closely or inquisitively ; also : to make a nosy or presumptuous inquiry
4) Patronage: the support or influence of a patron
5) Merited: to be worthy of or entitled or liable to
6) Bungalows: a one-storied house with a low-pitched roof ; also : a house having one and a half stories and usually a front porch
7) Solicitude: the state of being concerned and anxious
Chapter 10
1) Sporadic: occurring occasionally, singly, or in irregular or random instances
2) Renovating: to restore to a former better state
3) Immediacy: the quality or state of being immediate
4) Luminous: emitting or reflecting usually steady, suffused, or glowing light
5) Exasperated: to cause irritation or annoyance to
6) Catchall: something that holds or includes odds and ends or a wide variety of things
7) Inculcate: to teach and impress by frequent repetitions or admonitions
8) Regress: an act or the privilege of going or coming back
9) Pestilence: something that is destructive or pernicious
10) Afoot: on foot
11) Hobbesian: of or relating to the English philosopher Thomas Hobbes or Hobbism
12) Quarrels: a square-headed bolt or arrow especially for a crossbow
13) Corporeal: having, consisting of, or relating to a physical material body
14) Eroded: to diminish or destroy by degrees
15) Legerdemain: a display of skill or adroitness
16) Indissoluble: incapable of being annulled, undone, or broken
17) Delusion: the act of deluding : the state of being deluded
18) Waning: to fall gradually from power, prosperity, or influence
Chapter 11
1) Exuberant: joyously unrestrained and enthusiastic
2) Gutted: to extract all the essential passages or portions from
3) Puzzlement: puzzled
4) Voluminous: consisting of many folds, coils, or convolutions
5) Industrialists: one owning or engaged in the management of an industry : manufacturer
6) Redistributed: to spread to other areas
7) Apprehensive: viewing the future with anxiety or alarm
8) Filch: to appropriate furtively or casually
9) Emulate: to strive to equal or excel
10) Giddy: lightheartedly silly
11) Succumbing: to be brought to an end (as death) by the effect of destructive or disruptive forces
12) Vigor: active bodily or mental strength or force
Chapter 12
1) Heeler: one that heels
2) Coup: a brilliant, sudden, and usually highly successful stroke or act
3) Wading: to pass or cross by wading
4) Phalanx: a body of troops in close array
5) Jockeyed: to deal shrewdly or fraudulently with
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English 201B
Social Entrepreneur Research Essay
Sources/Cites:
1) Beach, Wendy. "The Omega Boys Club: Changing Boys to Men." The Philadelphia Tribune 113(1996): 12. Print.
2) Taylor, Donald. "Joe Marshall: Formative Father Figure." Essence 23(1993): 48. Print.
3) Marshall Jr., Wheeler, Connie, Dr. Joseph. Street Soldiers. Delta Corte Press, 1996. Print
4) "Street Soldiers: Omega Boys Club." Omega Boys Club 2007 Web.April 27, 2009..
5) "Dr. Joseph Marshall: Treating the Violence Virus." Cbs Broadcasting Inc. Web.April 27 2009..
6) "Martin Luther Ling Jr. Celebrations." Cbs Interactive Inc. 2009 Web.27 April 2009..
7) "News From the Mission Cape Town, South Africa." Us Department of State 29 March 2009 Web.27 April 2009..
8) Exodus Online 2 May 1998 Web.6 May 2009..
Outline:
Treana Penn
English 201B M/W 10-12
Professor Sabir
2.Doctor E. Marshall has identified the female and male youth risk of becoming dead or incarcerated.
3.The name of the organization that was started is Omegas Boy’s Club located in San Francisco, Ca.
4.Omega Boy’s Club reaches out towards the community creating a family type environment.
5.They decided to address this issue because they wanted to increase the youth to stay ‘Alive and Free’.
6.The community owns this process by continuing to join or to tell others about the good of the organization.
7.The local component is by the city helping Omega Boy’s Club stay funded by connecting with different organizations and the city.
Draft:
Treana Penn
English 201B
May 20 2009
Dr. Joseph Marshall jr. Has taken the responsibility to give back to his community by starting a nonprofit organization for the youth. It is said that we are a product of our environment, Dr. marshall grew up in a single mother home in the rough area of Los Angeles. One day he picked up a book about Malcolm X and read what it had to offer his brain. The words of Malcolm X inspired and changed his thinking process causing him to look at life more optimistically. He refers that book to every man he meets, because he feels it is for every man to learn from. It even inspired him to write his own book, Street Soldier: One Man's Struggle to Save a Generation, one Life at a Time.
After his life epiphany he went onto the college world receiving many degrees. He gained; a B.A in Political Science and Sociology from the University of San Francisco, Ca M.A in Education from San Francisco State University, a Ph D in Psychology from the Wright Institute in Berkeley, Ca. He also received Honorary Doctorate of Humane Letters from Morehouse College and University of San Francisco. Dr. Marshall has one son that he teaches that everybody's life is important. Father and child relationship and male role models are important another reason for Omegas Boys Club. He was employed as a teacher and administrator for 25 years of San Francisco Unifed School District.
The organization was founded in February 1987 by Dr. Marshall and Jack Jacqua. This current generation has been lost and Dr. Marshall and Jack has been on a mission to find it and restore it. Omega Boys Club started out with just boys and later on in the years girls began to be involved in the movement Omega Boys Club lives by motto to ‘stay Alive and Free’. There is no member or no fees to be apart of the Omegas Boys Club, it is a free program. They hold Leadership Academy classes consisting math and literature every Tuesday from 5:30-8:00pm and family meetings from 8:30-10:00pm Omega’s goal is to keep the youth in school and to be aware of anything that will stop them from doing so. Omega’s Boys Club is also a scholarship program, over the past years they have sent 141 Omega Students to different colleges and they all graduated. Every student that graduated, somebody from Omega was there to capture that moment. There are many trainers available to teach social and employment skills.
Many people have experienced and heard how Omegas Boy Club has affected many people in the San Francisco, Bay Area. There has been said many people who wished there was an Omega Boys Club in their own city or State. Dr. Marshall and the staff of Omega expands as much as possible by teaching everything they teach in Leadership Classes to Elementary and Middle School classes. “Coach” Wilburn Jigetts spread so much wisdom before he passed in 2003 “the more you know, the more you owe” is one of his coachism that would represent what Omega is. Coach Jiggetts was the elder of The Omega family, like the grandfather, every year Omega celebrates his life with a memorial celebration. The Omega team has traveled the world to share the works of being “Alive and Free”. Omega has done its job by making an impact in its community to keep the youth “Alive and Free”. Yet, in reality there job is not done, because their plan is to keep the movement going on forever. Omega has not decreased the rate of violence, but it has increased the knowledge of the consequences of violence. Many people have participated in Omega keeping youth and adults out of street decreasing the statistic rate in San Francisco area, bay area. My life has personally changed from Omega. I have taken the Leadership classes, that has given me a different aspect on life on the way I handle every day situations. Out of all the programs that Omega had to offer the Black College Tour that they paid half for. I was able to visit the college of my dreams that I always told Dr. Marshall about. We were able to meet new people, have fun, and learn black history. Dr. Marshall told me that If “I claim something as mine it will be mine”, so I claimed Clark Atlanta University to be my school that I transfer to. The leaders of Omega teach us respect and I have nothing, but respect for everybody in the Omega family.
A Social Entrepreneur is a person who realizes the issues in their community. They find solutions to the problems by creating businesses that can help the issues. The businesses are usually non-profit, because they are more concerned for the change and not the money. No pun intended. Dr. Marshall has fit these categories of being a social entrepreneur by creating Omega Boys Club. Dr. Marshall is a role to his community and his idea will live on forever.
Final draft:
Treana Penn
English 201B
May 20 2009
The youth of the Bay Area has a higher rate of being dead or in jail than being 'Alive and Free'. Dr. Joseph Marshall Jr. a social entrepreneur of San Francisco, CA. He felt the need to give back to his community by starting a nonprofit organization for the youth. An organization for youth where they can have a safe environment to hang out while learning to be successful at the same time. Social entrepreneurs are people that point out a problem in their community and start up their own business to change the social problem. Social entrepreneurs are dedicated to fixing the problem(s) of their community with a vision of a better future. Dr. Marshall jr. Took on the role of being social entrepreneur to improve his own community.
Dr. Joseph Marshall jr. Has taken the responsibility to give back to his community by starting a nonprofit organization for the youth. It began when doctor Marshall was in his last years of high school, when he was going to give up on his life and drop out of high school. It is said that we are a product of our environment, Dr. marshall grew up in a single mother home in the rough area of Los Angeles. One day he picked up a book about Malcolm X and read what it had to offer his brain. The words of Malcolm X inspired and changed his thinking process causing him to look at life more optimistically. He refers that book to every man he meets, because he feels it is for every man to learn from. It even inspired him to write his own book, Street Soldier: One Man's Struggle to Save a Generation, one Life at a Time.
After his life epiphany he went onto the college world receiving many degrees. He gained; a B.A in Political Science and Sociology from the University of San Francisco, Ca M.A in Education from San Francisco State University, a Ph D in Psychology from the Wright Institute in Berkeley, Ca. He also received Honorary Doctorate of Humane Letters from Morehouse College and University of San Francisco. Dr. Marshall has one son that he teaches that everybody's life is important. Father and child relationship and male role models are important another reason for Omegas Boys Club. He was employed as a teacher and administrator for 25 years of San Francisco Unifed School District.
The organization was founded in February 1987 by Dr. Marshall and Jack Jacqua. Omega was made to decrease the high rate of inner city youth either dropping out of school, dying or being in jail. It has been recently dated that by race, those who are incarcerated; 43.9% black, 18.26% Hispanic, 34.72% white, and 3.11% other. By population; 12.32% black, 12.55% Hispanic, 69.13% white, and 6% other. Every day youth ages from 16-24 mainly minorities end up dead or in jail. This current generation has been lost and Dr. Marshall and Jack has been on a mission to find it and restore it. Omega Boys Club started out with just boys and later on in the years girls began to be involved in the movement Omega Boys Club lives by motto to ‘stay Alive and Free’. There is no member or no fees to be apart of the Omegas Boys Club, it is a free program. They hold Leadership Academy classes consisting math and literature every Tuesday from 5:30-8:00pm and family meetings from 8:30-10:00pm Omega’s goal is to keep the youth in school and to be aware of anything that will stop them from doing so. Omega’s Boys Club is also a scholarship program, over the past years they have sent 141 Omega Students to different colleges and they all graduated. Every student that graduated, somebody from Omega was there to capture that moment. There are many trainers available to teach social and employment skills.
Many people have experienced and heard how Omegas Boy Club has affected many people in the San Francisco, Bay Area. There has been said many people who wished there was an Omega Boys Club in their own city or State. Dr. Marshall and the staff of Omega expands as much as possible by teaching everything they teach in Leadership Classes to Elementary and Middle School classes. “Coach” Wilburn Jigetts spread so much wisdom before he passed in 2003 “the more you know, the more you owe” is one of his coachism that would represent what Omega is. Coach Jiggetts was the elder of The Omega family, like the grandfather, every year Omega celebrates his life with a memorial celebration. The Omega team has traveled the world to share the works of being “Alive and Free”. The organization continues to grow by networking with the city and some foundations that are non profit as well and fundraisers to keep the program funded. Omega also continues to grows by what is called their voice, “Street Soldiers”, a radio show hosted by Dr. Marshall and Lady Estell every Sunday night at eight pm, on 106.1 fm. There are 13 radio stations that affiliate with Omega radio station, because they believe in Omega’s Goal.
Omega has done its job by making an impact in its community to keep the youth “Alive and Free”. Yet, in reality there job is not done, because their plan is to keep the movement going on forever. Omega has not decreased the rate of violence, but it has increased the knowledge of the consequences of violence. Many people have participated in Omega keeping youth and adults out of street decreasing the statistic rate in San Francisco area, bay area. My life has personally changed from Omega. I have taken the Leadership classes, that has given me a different aspect on life on the way I handle every day situations. Out of all the programs that Omega had to offer the Black College Tour that they paid half for. I was able to visit the college of my dreams that I always told Dr. Marshall about. We were able to meet new people, have fun, and learn black history. Dr. Marshall told me that If “I claim something as mine it will be mine”, so I claimed Clark Atlanta University to be my school that I transfer to. The leaders of Omega teach us respect and I have nothing, but respect for everybody in the Omega family.
A Social Entrepreneur is a person who realizes the issues in their community. They find solutions to the problems by creating businesses that can help the issues. The businesses are usually non-profit, because they are more concerned for the change and not the money. No pun intended. Dr. Marshall has fit these categories of being a social entrepreneur by creating Omega Boys Club. Dr. Marshall is a role to his community and his idea will live on forever. The benefit of social entrepreneurs they work on change for change and not the money.
1) Beach, Wendy. "The Omega Boys Club: Changing Boys to Men." The Philadelphia Tribune 113(1996): 12. Print.
2) Taylor, Donald. "Joe Marshall: Formative Father Figure." Essence 23(1993): 48. Print.
3) Marshall Jr., Wheeler, Connie, Dr. Joseph. Street Soldiers. Delta Corte Press, 1996. Print
4) "Street Soldiers: Omega Boys Club." Omega Boys Club 2007 Web.April 27, 2009.
5) "Dr. Joseph Marshall: Treating the Violence Virus." Cbs Broadcasting Inc. Web.April 27 2009.
6) "Martin Luther Ling Jr. Celebrations." Cbs Interactive Inc. 2009 Web.27 April 2009.
7) "News From the Mission Cape Town, South Africa." Us Department of State 29 March 2009 Web.27 April 2009.
8) Exodus Online 2 May 1998 Web.6 May 2009.
Outline:
Treana Penn
English 201B M/W 10-12
Professor Sabir
Local Social Entrepreneur Planning Sheet
1.The social entrepreneur that is being identified in my community is Dr. Joseph E. Marshall Jr.2.Doctor E. Marshall has identified the female and male youth risk of becoming dead or incarcerated.
3.The name of the organization that was started is Omegas Boy’s Club located in San Francisco, Ca.
4.Omega Boy’s Club reaches out towards the community creating a family type environment.
5.They decided to address this issue because they wanted to increase the youth to stay ‘Alive and Free’.
6.The community owns this process by continuing to join or to tell others about the good of the organization.
7.The local component is by the city helping Omega Boy’s Club stay funded by connecting with different organizations and the city.
Draft:
Treana Penn
English 201B
May 20 2009
A Social Entrepreneur: Dr. Joseph Marshall
The youth of the Bay Area has a higher rate of being dead or in jail than being 'Alive and Free'. Dr. Joseph Marshall Jr. a social entrepreneur of San Francisco, CA. He felt the need to give back to his community by starting a nonprofit organization for the youth. An organization for youth where they can have a safe environment to hang out while learning to be successful at the same time. Social entrepreneurs are people that point out a problem in their community and start up their own business to change the social problem. Social entrepreneurs are dedicated to fixing the problem(s) of their community with a vision of a better future. Dr. Marshall jr. Took on the role of being social entrepreneur to improve his own community.Dr. Joseph Marshall jr. Has taken the responsibility to give back to his community by starting a nonprofit organization for the youth. It is said that we are a product of our environment, Dr. marshall grew up in a single mother home in the rough area of Los Angeles. One day he picked up a book about Malcolm X and read what it had to offer his brain. The words of Malcolm X inspired and changed his thinking process causing him to look at life more optimistically. He refers that book to every man he meets, because he feels it is for every man to learn from. It even inspired him to write his own book, Street Soldier: One Man's Struggle to Save a Generation, one Life at a Time.
After his life epiphany he went onto the college world receiving many degrees. He gained; a B.A in Political Science and Sociology from the University of San Francisco, Ca M.A in Education from San Francisco State University, a Ph D in Psychology from the Wright Institute in Berkeley, Ca. He also received Honorary Doctorate of Humane Letters from Morehouse College and University of San Francisco. Dr. Marshall has one son that he teaches that everybody's life is important. Father and child relationship and male role models are important another reason for Omegas Boys Club. He was employed as a teacher and administrator for 25 years of San Francisco Unifed School District.
The organization was founded in February 1987 by Dr. Marshall and Jack Jacqua. This current generation has been lost and Dr. Marshall and Jack has been on a mission to find it and restore it. Omega Boys Club started out with just boys and later on in the years girls began to be involved in the movement Omega Boys Club lives by motto to ‘stay Alive and Free’. There is no member or no fees to be apart of the Omegas Boys Club, it is a free program. They hold Leadership Academy classes consisting math and literature every Tuesday from 5:30-8:00pm and family meetings from 8:30-10:00pm Omega’s goal is to keep the youth in school and to be aware of anything that will stop them from doing so. Omega’s Boys Club is also a scholarship program, over the past years they have sent 141 Omega Students to different colleges and they all graduated. Every student that graduated, somebody from Omega was there to capture that moment. There are many trainers available to teach social and employment skills.
Many people have experienced and heard how Omegas Boy Club has affected many people in the San Francisco, Bay Area. There has been said many people who wished there was an Omega Boys Club in their own city or State. Dr. Marshall and the staff of Omega expands as much as possible by teaching everything they teach in Leadership Classes to Elementary and Middle School classes. “Coach” Wilburn Jigetts spread so much wisdom before he passed in 2003 “the more you know, the more you owe” is one of his coachism that would represent what Omega is. Coach Jiggetts was the elder of The Omega family, like the grandfather, every year Omega celebrates his life with a memorial celebration. The Omega team has traveled the world to share the works of being “Alive and Free”. Omega has done its job by making an impact in its community to keep the youth “Alive and Free”. Yet, in reality there job is not done, because their plan is to keep the movement going on forever. Omega has not decreased the rate of violence, but it has increased the knowledge of the consequences of violence. Many people have participated in Omega keeping youth and adults out of street decreasing the statistic rate in San Francisco area, bay area. My life has personally changed from Omega. I have taken the Leadership classes, that has given me a different aspect on life on the way I handle every day situations. Out of all the programs that Omega had to offer the Black College Tour that they paid half for. I was able to visit the college of my dreams that I always told Dr. Marshall about. We were able to meet new people, have fun, and learn black history. Dr. Marshall told me that If “I claim something as mine it will be mine”, so I claimed Clark Atlanta University to be my school that I transfer to. The leaders of Omega teach us respect and I have nothing, but respect for everybody in the Omega family.
A Social Entrepreneur is a person who realizes the issues in their community. They find solutions to the problems by creating businesses that can help the issues. The businesses are usually non-profit, because they are more concerned for the change and not the money. No pun intended. Dr. Marshall has fit these categories of being a social entrepreneur by creating Omega Boys Club. Dr. Marshall is a role to his community and his idea will live on forever.
Final draft:
Treana Penn
English 201B
May 20 2009
A Social Entrepreneur: Dr. Joseph Marshall
The youth of the Bay Area has a higher rate of being dead or in jail than being 'Alive and Free'. Dr. Joseph Marshall Jr. a social entrepreneur of San Francisco, CA. He felt the need to give back to his community by starting a nonprofit organization for the youth. An organization for youth where they can have a safe environment to hang out while learning to be successful at the same time. Social entrepreneurs are people that point out a problem in their community and start up their own business to change the social problem. Social entrepreneurs are dedicated to fixing the problem(s) of their community with a vision of a better future. Dr. Marshall jr. Took on the role of being social entrepreneur to improve his own community.
Dr. Joseph Marshall jr. Has taken the responsibility to give back to his community by starting a nonprofit organization for the youth. It began when doctor Marshall was in his last years of high school, when he was going to give up on his life and drop out of high school. It is said that we are a product of our environment, Dr. marshall grew up in a single mother home in the rough area of Los Angeles. One day he picked up a book about Malcolm X and read what it had to offer his brain. The words of Malcolm X inspired and changed his thinking process causing him to look at life more optimistically. He refers that book to every man he meets, because he feels it is for every man to learn from. It even inspired him to write his own book, Street Soldier: One Man's Struggle to Save a Generation, one Life at a Time.
After his life epiphany he went onto the college world receiving many degrees. He gained; a B.A in Political Science and Sociology from the University of San Francisco, Ca M.A in Education from San Francisco State University, a Ph D in Psychology from the Wright Institute in Berkeley, Ca. He also received Honorary Doctorate of Humane Letters from Morehouse College and University of San Francisco. Dr. Marshall has one son that he teaches that everybody's life is important. Father and child relationship and male role models are important another reason for Omegas Boys Club. He was employed as a teacher and administrator for 25 years of San Francisco Unifed School District.
The organization was founded in February 1987 by Dr. Marshall and Jack Jacqua. Omega was made to decrease the high rate of inner city youth either dropping out of school, dying or being in jail. It has been recently dated that by race, those who are incarcerated; 43.9% black, 18.26% Hispanic, 34.72% white, and 3.11% other. By population; 12.32% black, 12.55% Hispanic, 69.13% white, and 6% other. Every day youth ages from 16-24 mainly minorities end up dead or in jail. This current generation has been lost and Dr. Marshall and Jack has been on a mission to find it and restore it. Omega Boys Club started out with just boys and later on in the years girls began to be involved in the movement Omega Boys Club lives by motto to ‘stay Alive and Free’. There is no member or no fees to be apart of the Omegas Boys Club, it is a free program. They hold Leadership Academy classes consisting math and literature every Tuesday from 5:30-8:00pm and family meetings from 8:30-10:00pm Omega’s goal is to keep the youth in school and to be aware of anything that will stop them from doing so. Omega’s Boys Club is also a scholarship program, over the past years they have sent 141 Omega Students to different colleges and they all graduated. Every student that graduated, somebody from Omega was there to capture that moment. There are many trainers available to teach social and employment skills.
Many people have experienced and heard how Omegas Boy Club has affected many people in the San Francisco, Bay Area. There has been said many people who wished there was an Omega Boys Club in their own city or State. Dr. Marshall and the staff of Omega expands as much as possible by teaching everything they teach in Leadership Classes to Elementary and Middle School classes. “Coach” Wilburn Jigetts spread so much wisdom before he passed in 2003 “the more you know, the more you owe” is one of his coachism that would represent what Omega is. Coach Jiggetts was the elder of The Omega family, like the grandfather, every year Omega celebrates his life with a memorial celebration. The Omega team has traveled the world to share the works of being “Alive and Free”. The organization continues to grow by networking with the city and some foundations that are non profit as well and fundraisers to keep the program funded. Omega also continues to grows by what is called their voice, “Street Soldiers”, a radio show hosted by Dr. Marshall and Lady Estell every Sunday night at eight pm, on 106.1 fm. There are 13 radio stations that affiliate with Omega radio station, because they believe in Omega’s Goal.
Omega has done its job by making an impact in its community to keep the youth “Alive and Free”. Yet, in reality there job is not done, because their plan is to keep the movement going on forever. Omega has not decreased the rate of violence, but it has increased the knowledge of the consequences of violence. Many people have participated in Omega keeping youth and adults out of street decreasing the statistic rate in San Francisco area, bay area. My life has personally changed from Omega. I have taken the Leadership classes, that has given me a different aspect on life on the way I handle every day situations. Out of all the programs that Omega had to offer the Black College Tour that they paid half for. I was able to visit the college of my dreams that I always told Dr. Marshall about. We were able to meet new people, have fun, and learn black history. Dr. Marshall told me that If “I claim something as mine it will be mine”, so I claimed Clark Atlanta University to be my school that I transfer to. The leaders of Omega teach us respect and I have nothing, but respect for everybody in the Omega family.
A Social Entrepreneur is a person who realizes the issues in their community. They find solutions to the problems by creating businesses that can help the issues. The businesses are usually non-profit, because they are more concerned for the change and not the money. No pun intended. Dr. Marshall has fit these categories of being a social entrepreneur by creating Omega Boys Club. Dr. Marshall is a role to his community and his idea will live on forever. The benefit of social entrepreneurs they work on change for change and not the money.
Free Writes
Treana Penn
English 201B
10-12 M/W
Freewrite: I Need Love by LL Cool J
This whole experience has been such a revelation
It's taught me love and how to be a real man
To always be considerate and do all I can
Protect you you're my lady and you mean so much
My body tingles all over from the slightest touch
These four stanzas of, I Need Love, stood out the most to me. In the month, where "Love" has its own day, this song matches perfectly with the theme of Valentine's Day. When LL Cool J, uses the word revelation describing Love, that shows it means a lot to him. Love means the same to me as it does to him wether it is good or bad love. Love is a learning process that starts off from learning from relationships. Relationships with yourself, family, girlfriend, boyfriend, work, friends etc,. Every girl always wants the perfect girl just like boys want their perfect girl. But everybody knows, even LL Cool J realizes, that is just living in a fantasy world to be able to get that. Everything that he wrote, is something that I can relate to with love. Also, everything he saying is something that I appreciate in a man. A man being a man, but yet with a sensitive side.
7:23 PM
Treana Penn
April 6, 2009
Professor Sabir
Barack Obama grew up in a single parent home without his father in his life. While he was growing up he only had a couple of encounters with his father. Those couple times he left as quickly as he would come around. He also dealt with his parents being an interracial couple making things more complicated. Obama has not gotten over the fact that his dad was in the picture teaching him how to be a man. Even though, Obama has had his grandma and a family friend show him the ropes out of the kindness of their heart.
Paraphrasing
By paraphrasing another author's words it shows that you understand their their opinions. Understanding their words enough, that you can write it in your own words without changing the meaning of the sentences. If you are not paraphrasing then you are plagiarizing
the writer's work, word by word which is illegal. Or people try to get away with plagiarism by replacing the author's words with similar words that mean the same thing. There is also Literal paraphrasing, when you replace the author's words and phrase, but the sentence structure stays the same.
Stewart pidd
I feel that Stewart Pidd Hates English is a great way to refresh our English skills. Even though, it looks like easy tasks for an elementary students. It is material that as elementary school we majority of the time do not remember way back then everything what we have learned. I know it will help me and the rest of my classmates with our basic English.
Dear Ms Sabir,
This is my second semester of being enrolled in College of Alameda. Also my second semester of being in your English Class, this time I passed 201A with a B into 201B. In the beginning, of last semester I did not respond to the post at first. In the end I started to realize how important it was to commit to every single thing. Your spring of 2009 letter for this semester's English class is very different, very long still, but different. Because, I did not realize how much you were involved with children and helped volunteer for community programs. It really shows how you are serious about helping us as well. Even though, you are a professor that is use to dealing with children, I appreciate that you treat us like the adults we are instead of children.
I don't understand how you were able to graduate from high school at the age of fifteen. The only person I think who did that was Martin Luther King Jr. or he graduated from college at fifteen. Either one of the two. I was wondering how that was even possible to accomplish. I will probally find that out later.
I must admit that 201A was a challenge. The 201A was challenging to my self skills, knowledge, maturity, concentration and my goals. I always loved writing, just did not know how to process out my writings. I used to receive low grades in high school. Which I brought over to College starting off with a D in the middle of the semester. Then putting fort more effort and time. I passed your class with a B that gave me more confidence in myself.
Treana Penn
English 201B
M/W 10-12
Love Your Enemies
Martin Luther King Jr says, "this command is an absolute necessity for the survival of our civilization. Yes, it is love that will save our world and our civilization, love even for enemies." (1). I feel love is a struggle, especially when it comes to loving an enemy or enemies. In this essay, Martin Luther King explains, love is an important factor of live to make it through this world. King feels that we must love our enemies, because we are all God's children. So that same person who could possibly be an enemy, could also possibly be God's child, too. His blueprint to loving an enemy may seem difficult to understand, but it is to " Love yourself". By looking at everything your enemy may dislike you for and find the beauty of it that is inside yourself. I think that President Barack Obama lives by Martin Luther Kings sermons and words. Because, he has lived King's speech of change, by becoming the first African American President. As Obama quotes, ""There's not a liberal America and a conservative America; there is the United States of America. There's not a black America and a white America and Latino America and Asian America; there is the United States of America," (Obama, 2004) showing his love for everyone and not discriminating as an enemy would do.
Treana Penn
M/W 10-11:50
“Wear Clean Draws”
In the song, Wear Clean Draws, a line is quoted that my step mom repeats to me constantly over and over that sticks with me as a young adult. She always tells me to stay prepared, so that you do not have to get ready. To me that quote she tells me relates to the song, “Wear Clean Draws”, because it talks about staying ready for any obstacle thrown your way. The reason it sticks in my head is that at times I do procrastinate and the quote prevents me from procrastinating in life. It is relevant to when he says “Wear Clean Draws”, because you might end up in any situation. The statement is like a metaphor. By wearing clean draws is like being fresh, prepared and clean. For example, if you have on clean draws and some how end up in a concussion, at least you will know that the person is clean and takes care of themselves. So if you make the decision to wear clean draws, you will be able to be prepared for any situation.
Treana Penn
M/W 10-11:50
1/20/09 A Day of a New Day
On January 20, 2009, I walked into twenty days after the year of 2008, realizing that the changes in my life were just at its peak point. The night before, I prepared for the anxious day of the inauguration of a new President. I drew a picture of President Barack Obama on the back of one of my favorite shirts, with a favorite quote of mine that he said. The quote basically saying that, America is America and we are all as a people united. I ironed my shirt, ate my breakfast, I watched the beginning of the inauguration on television with my step dad anxiously, before I went on my way to school. The day of the inauguration, there were people every where heading to different events, people of every race coming together as one witness change. As I took the Bart to school I realized looking around at every one sitting in the seats. What if the Bart was segregated? What if women could not vote? What if I did not have the right to speak out about my feelings? I would not be able to go to school, to learn or either to vote. Those are privileges that I value.
As I got to school, I wore my shirt with President Obama in the back of it with pride. I felt proud to speak out loud in school and to appreciate my education. President Obama becoming elected was not a shock to me, the time frame of it being in my lifetime was shocking. The year I was able to register vote, I voted for a President that came along and created a new stereotype for African-Americans. I feel that a change starts in an individual and if every individual makes changes for the better. The world can slowly see a brighter day.
English 201B
10-12 M/W
Freewrite: I Need Love by LL Cool J
This whole experience has been such a revelation
It's taught me love and how to be a real man
To always be considerate and do all I can
Protect you you're my lady and you mean so much
My body tingles all over from the slightest touch
These four stanzas of, I Need Love, stood out the most to me. In the month, where "Love" has its own day, this song matches perfectly with the theme of Valentine's Day. When LL Cool J, uses the word revelation describing Love, that shows it means a lot to him. Love means the same to me as it does to him wether it is good or bad love. Love is a learning process that starts off from learning from relationships. Relationships with yourself, family, girlfriend, boyfriend, work, friends etc,. Every girl always wants the perfect girl just like boys want their perfect girl. But everybody knows, even LL Cool J realizes, that is just living in a fantasy world to be able to get that. Everything that he wrote, is something that I can relate to with love. Also, everything he saying is something that I appreciate in a man. A man being a man, but yet with a sensitive side.
7:23 PM
Treana Penn
April 6, 2009
Professor Sabir
Obama’s Forgiveness
Barack Obama grew up in a single parent home without his father in his life. While he was growing up he only had a couple of encounters with his father. Those couple times he left as quickly as he would come around. He also dealt with his parents being an interracial couple making things more complicated. Obama has not gotten over the fact that his dad was in the picture teaching him how to be a man. Even though, Obama has had his grandma and a family friend show him the ropes out of the kindness of their heart.
Paraphrasing
By paraphrasing another author's words it shows that you understand their their opinions. Understanding their words enough, that you can write it in your own words without changing the meaning of the sentences. If you are not paraphrasing then you are plagiarizing
the writer's work, word by word which is illegal. Or people try to get away with plagiarism by replacing the author's words with similar words that mean the same thing. There is also Literal paraphrasing, when you replace the author's words and phrase, but the sentence structure stays the same.
Stewart pidd
I feel that Stewart Pidd Hates English is a great way to refresh our English skills. Even though, it looks like easy tasks for an elementary students. It is material that as elementary school we majority of the time do not remember way back then everything what we have learned. I know it will help me and the rest of my classmates with our basic English.
Dear Ms Sabir,
This is my second semester of being enrolled in College of Alameda. Also my second semester of being in your English Class, this time I passed 201A with a B into 201B. In the beginning, of last semester I did not respond to the post at first. In the end I started to realize how important it was to commit to every single thing. Your spring of 2009 letter for this semester's English class is very different, very long still, but different. Because, I did not realize how much you were involved with children and helped volunteer for community programs. It really shows how you are serious about helping us as well. Even though, you are a professor that is use to dealing with children, I appreciate that you treat us like the adults we are instead of children.
I don't understand how you were able to graduate from high school at the age of fifteen. The only person I think who did that was Martin Luther King Jr. or he graduated from college at fifteen. Either one of the two. I was wondering how that was even possible to accomplish. I will probally find that out later.
I must admit that 201A was a challenge. The 201A was challenging to my self skills, knowledge, maturity, concentration and my goals. I always loved writing, just did not know how to process out my writings. I used to receive low grades in high school. Which I brought over to College starting off with a D in the middle of the semester. Then putting fort more effort and time. I passed your class with a B that gave me more confidence in myself.
Treana Penn
English 201B
M/W 10-12
Love Your Enemies
Martin Luther King Jr says, "this command is an absolute necessity for the survival of our civilization. Yes, it is love that will save our world and our civilization, love even for enemies." (1). I feel love is a struggle, especially when it comes to loving an enemy or enemies. In this essay, Martin Luther King explains, love is an important factor of live to make it through this world. King feels that we must love our enemies, because we are all God's children. So that same person who could possibly be an enemy, could also possibly be God's child, too. His blueprint to loving an enemy may seem difficult to understand, but it is to " Love yourself". By looking at everything your enemy may dislike you for and find the beauty of it that is inside yourself. I think that President Barack Obama lives by Martin Luther Kings sermons and words. Because, he has lived King's speech of change, by becoming the first African American President. As Obama quotes, ""There's not a liberal America and a conservative America; there is the United States of America. There's not a black America and a white America and Latino America and Asian America; there is the United States of America," (Obama, 2004) showing his love for everyone and not discriminating as an enemy would do.
Treana Penn
M/W 10-11:50
“Wear Clean Draws”
In the song, Wear Clean Draws, a line is quoted that my step mom repeats to me constantly over and over that sticks with me as a young adult. She always tells me to stay prepared, so that you do not have to get ready. To me that quote she tells me relates to the song, “Wear Clean Draws”, because it talks about staying ready for any obstacle thrown your way. The reason it sticks in my head is that at times I do procrastinate and the quote prevents me from procrastinating in life. It is relevant to when he says “Wear Clean Draws”, because you might end up in any situation. The statement is like a metaphor. By wearing clean draws is like being fresh, prepared and clean. For example, if you have on clean draws and some how end up in a concussion, at least you will know that the person is clean and takes care of themselves. So if you make the decision to wear clean draws, you will be able to be prepared for any situation.
Treana Penn
M/W 10-11:50
1/20/09 A Day of a New Day
On January 20, 2009, I walked into twenty days after the year of 2008, realizing that the changes in my life were just at its peak point. The night before, I prepared for the anxious day of the inauguration of a new President. I drew a picture of President Barack Obama on the back of one of my favorite shirts, with a favorite quote of mine that he said. The quote basically saying that, America is America and we are all as a people united. I ironed my shirt, ate my breakfast, I watched the beginning of the inauguration on television with my step dad anxiously, before I went on my way to school. The day of the inauguration, there were people every where heading to different events, people of every race coming together as one witness change. As I took the Bart to school I realized looking around at every one sitting in the seats. What if the Bart was segregated? What if women could not vote? What if I did not have the right to speak out about my feelings? I would not be able to go to school, to learn or either to vote. Those are privileges that I value.
As I got to school, I wore my shirt with President Obama in the back of it with pride. I felt proud to speak out loud in school and to appreciate my education. President Obama becoming elected was not a shock to me, the time frame of it being in my lifetime was shocking. The year I was able to register vote, I voted for a President that came along and created a new stereotype for African-Americans. I feel that a change starts in an individual and if every individual makes changes for the better. The world can slowly see a brighter day.
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