My Narrative Essay
Here we are in the year of 2009, During a time in the world where everything is getting more hectic. I am currently in my second semester of college. I have been able to grasp everything your not suppose to do. With everything that life throws at your way, you have to be able to adapt and roll with it. By taking English 201B I have been able to improve my skills by seeing everything I'm good at and what I need to improve.
This spring Semester was very hard compared to my first semester in Fall. Our class felt a little bit rushed, because it felt like as if it went by so fast. It seem like everything from being, sick, family being sick, people dying, school and work. Things just began to become overwhelming. I have learned after all this my way of organizing my life. It goes also for my homework assignments and my essays. I have to be able to be more focus and set goals. Because, I realize that life will not feel sorry for your circumstances.
My goal is to learn how to prepare myself for obstacles. For example, with the Stewart Pidd's Hate English, it gives you examples of process to work on essays. I appreciate things that are broken down, because you can understand everything in depth. I am not of a broad picture, I am more of sketch and rough drafts type person. In the class it was diverse and everybody felt the same way and we were able to work together. This semester will change my motivates about how I approach everything in life. That way I will always be prepared for everything that will prepare me for life.
Friday, May 29, 2009
Pidd's Subject Verb Agreement
Treana Penn
English 201B M/W 10-12
May 16 2009
Subject-Verb Agreement Essay
The authors of Stewart Pidd Hates English devote an entire section to Subject-verb Agreements.Stewart Pidd does not have the skills to master subject-verb agreements, because he does not correctly use them. The rule for subject-verb agreements is that the sentence structure must agree. According to Stewart Pidd’s essay “Nothing Ever Changes in Ludville” gives evidence that Pidd incorrectly uses subject-verb agreements.
Pidd makes a verb before subject error. He writes, "There is rumors going around Ludville" (1). His verb and subject do not agree with each other. The rule for subject-verb agreements is that subjects must agree with their verbs. Pidd can fix this error by replacing the singular verb "is" with the plural verb "are". The correct sentence will read, "There are rumors going around Ludville".
Pidd makes a company name error. He writes, "Beaugus Properties are going to buy up the strand and build a huge resort." (1). The company name rule in the subject verb agreement are used as words are singular. Pidd can fix the sentence by removing the plural noun "are" with the singular noun "is". The correct sentence will read, "Beaugus Properties is going to buy up the strand to build a huge resort."
After reading over Stewart Pidd's essay, "Nothing Ever changes in Ludville" shows that Pidd has trouble with using his subject-verb agreements. By correcting his errors, he will find out that he could master subject-verb agreements.
English 201B M/W 10-12
May 16 2009
Subject-Verb Agreement Essay
The authors of Stewart Pidd Hates English devote an entire section to Subject-verb Agreements.Stewart Pidd does not have the skills to master subject-verb agreements, because he does not correctly use them. The rule for subject-verb agreements is that the sentence structure must agree. According to Stewart Pidd’s essay “Nothing Ever Changes in Ludville” gives evidence that Pidd incorrectly uses subject-verb agreements.
Pidd makes a verb before subject error. He writes, "There is rumors going around Ludville" (1). His verb and subject do not agree with each other. The rule for subject-verb agreements is that subjects must agree with their verbs. Pidd can fix this error by replacing the singular verb "is" with the plural verb "are". The correct sentence will read, "There are rumors going around Ludville".
Pidd makes a company name error. He writes, "Beaugus Properties are going to buy up the strand and build a huge resort." (1). The company name rule in the subject verb agreement are used as words are singular. Pidd can fix the sentence by removing the plural noun "are" with the singular noun "is". The correct sentence will read, "Beaugus Properties is going to buy up the strand to build a huge resort."
After reading over Stewart Pidd's essay, "Nothing Ever changes in Ludville" shows that Pidd has trouble with using his subject-verb agreements. By correcting his errors, he will find out that he could master subject-verb agreements.
Stewart Pidd's Pronoun Case Essay
Treana Penn
Professor Sabir
March 27 2009
Another Pidd Mistake
Pidd continues to make mistakes in with Pronoun cases. A pronoun case is the form that a pronoun takes to show its relationship to other words in a sentence. There are three cases: subjective, objective and possessive. He needs to change his pronoun cases with the right ones.
Stewart Pidd mistakenly uses a subjective case pronoun with a compound object. He states, “. . . Ditch wanted to come with Camper and I . . .” (1). There is not a preposition in front of “Camper and I”. The case rule for a preposition preceding a pronoun use the objective case if the pronoun follows a preposition. The pronoun “I” does not function as part of the subject. He can fix the error by replacing the subjective pronoun “I” with the correct case pronoun “me”. The correct sentence will read, “. . . Ditch wanted to come with Camper and me. . . .” (1).
Pidd does not use a case pronoun to modify an object. He states, “. . . After two of the generals attacked two of the hill drivers, Camper and I . . .” (1). The noun phrase “two of the hill drivers” functions as an object in the sentence. Pidd uses the case “ I” for the appositive that modifies the noun phrase. The pronoun used in an appositive does not have the same function as the noun it renames. He can correct the error by changing the pronoun “I” to the pronoun “me”. The correct sentence will read, “. . . After two of the Generals attacked two of the hill drivers, Camper and Me. . .” (1).
Pidd has trouble determining case with a comparison using the word “than”. He writes, “. . . Ditch was smarter than Camper and me. . .” (2). The key word that precedes the phrase “Camper and me” was, smarter. There is a comparison being made. The sentence does not make sense if Pidd finishes the sentence by writing, “me is”. Pidd can correct the sentence by using the subjective case pronouns for comparisons
using than and as. The sentence will read, “. . . Ditch was smarter than Camper and I. . . .”.
Stewart misuses the objective pronoun “me” as a part of a compound subject. He states, “. . . Me and Camper laughed hard because Ditch is probably the dumbest of the Dents. . .” (2). The subject of the sentence is “Me and Camper”. When the pronoun is part of the subject., the writer should use a subjective case. If you isolate the pronoun you want to test, your ear will often tell you if the case is incorrect. Pidd can fix the error by replacing the compound subject “Me and Camper” with a compound object “Camper and I”. The revised sentence will read, “. . . Camper and I, laughed hard because Ditch is probably the Dumbest of the Dents. . .” (2).
Pidd chose the wrong pronoun for his subject compliment. He writes, “It was he who told Ranger Encantado that I could see why she was a former Ludville Bat Guano Bay Queen” (2). Pidd uses the
Pronoun “he” for the subject compliment. The pronoun rule for the subject complement is to use subjective case pronouns for subjective complements. Pidd used a subjective case pronoun for the subject compliment. He can fix the sentence by switching the subject with the subject compliment. The sentence will now read, “ It was him that told Ranger Encantado that I could see why she was a former Ludville Bat Guano Bay Queen. . . .” (2).
Stewart Pidd makes a comparison mistake using “than” by picking the wrong pronoun case. He writes, “. . . you are almost pretty as her. . .” (2). Pidd makes a comparison in the sentence. Pidd uses the word “as” to make his comparison. He can check for the correct case when using “as” by adding a verb after the pronoun to complete the comparison. The sentence would not make sense if Pidd finished the sentence with “as pretty as her is”. To correct the sentence Pidd can replace the subjective case “her” with the objective case pronoun “she”. The revised sentence will read, “. . . you are almost as pretty as she is. . .” (2).
Pidd uses the wrong pronoun case for an appositive modifying the subject. He writes, “. . . I think I am going to ask my Pa, Sid, if the Pidd Men, Sid and me. . .” (2). The appositive “Sid and me” is modifying a subject. The case rule for modifying subjects is to use the same case for compliments as the subjects they modify. Pidd can fix the error by using the subjective case if the pronoun is modifying a subject; otherwise
use the objectives. The correct sentence will read, “. . . I think I am going to ask my Pa, Sid, if the Pidd Men, Sid and I. . . .” (2).
Throughout Stewart Pidd’s “Synthetica” essay he constantly made pronoun case errors that had to be fixed. His essay, was good, he just needed help. Now it essay of error free mistakes that will be enjoyable to read.
Professor Sabir
March 27 2009
Another Pidd Mistake
Pidd continues to make mistakes in with Pronoun cases. A pronoun case is the form that a pronoun takes to show its relationship to other words in a sentence. There are three cases: subjective, objective and possessive. He needs to change his pronoun cases with the right ones.
Stewart Pidd mistakenly uses a subjective case pronoun with a compound object. He states, “. . . Ditch wanted to come with Camper and I . . .” (1). There is not a preposition in front of “Camper and I”. The case rule for a preposition preceding a pronoun use the objective case if the pronoun follows a preposition. The pronoun “I” does not function as part of the subject. He can fix the error by replacing the subjective pronoun “I” with the correct case pronoun “me”. The correct sentence will read, “. . . Ditch wanted to come with Camper and me. . . .” (1).
Pidd does not use a case pronoun to modify an object. He states, “. . . After two of the generals attacked two of the hill drivers, Camper and I . . .” (1). The noun phrase “two of the hill drivers” functions as an object in the sentence. Pidd uses the case “ I” for the appositive that modifies the noun phrase. The pronoun used in an appositive does not have the same function as the noun it renames. He can correct the error by changing the pronoun “I” to the pronoun “me”. The correct sentence will read, “. . . After two of the Generals attacked two of the hill drivers, Camper and Me. . .” (1).
Pidd has trouble determining case with a comparison using the word “than”. He writes, “. . . Ditch was smarter than Camper and me. . .” (2). The key word that precedes the phrase “Camper and me” was, smarter. There is a comparison being made. The sentence does not make sense if Pidd finishes the sentence by writing, “me is”. Pidd can correct the sentence by using the subjective case pronouns for comparisons
using than and as. The sentence will read, “. . . Ditch was smarter than Camper and I. . . .”.
Stewart misuses the objective pronoun “me” as a part of a compound subject. He states, “. . . Me and Camper laughed hard because Ditch is probably the dumbest of the Dents. . .” (2). The subject of the sentence is “Me and Camper”. When the pronoun is part of the subject., the writer should use a subjective case. If you isolate the pronoun you want to test, your ear will often tell you if the case is incorrect. Pidd can fix the error by replacing the compound subject “Me and Camper” with a compound object “Camper and I”. The revised sentence will read, “. . . Camper and I, laughed hard because Ditch is probably the Dumbest of the Dents. . .” (2).
Pidd chose the wrong pronoun for his subject compliment. He writes, “It was he who told Ranger Encantado that I could see why she was a former Ludville Bat Guano Bay Queen” (2). Pidd uses the
Pronoun “he” for the subject compliment. The pronoun rule for the subject complement is to use subjective case pronouns for subjective complements. Pidd used a subjective case pronoun for the subject compliment. He can fix the sentence by switching the subject with the subject compliment. The sentence will now read, “ It was him that told Ranger Encantado that I could see why she was a former Ludville Bat Guano Bay Queen. . . .” (2).
Stewart Pidd makes a comparison mistake using “than” by picking the wrong pronoun case. He writes, “. . . you are almost pretty as her. . .” (2). Pidd makes a comparison in the sentence. Pidd uses the word “as” to make his comparison. He can check for the correct case when using “as” by adding a verb after the pronoun to complete the comparison. The sentence would not make sense if Pidd finished the sentence with “as pretty as her is”. To correct the sentence Pidd can replace the subjective case “her” with the objective case pronoun “she”. The revised sentence will read, “. . . you are almost as pretty as she is. . .” (2).
Pidd uses the wrong pronoun case for an appositive modifying the subject. He writes, “. . . I think I am going to ask my Pa, Sid, if the Pidd Men, Sid and me. . .” (2). The appositive “Sid and me” is modifying a subject. The case rule for modifying subjects is to use the same case for compliments as the subjects they modify. Pidd can fix the error by using the subjective case if the pronoun is modifying a subject; otherwise
use the objectives. The correct sentence will read, “. . . I think I am going to ask my Pa, Sid, if the Pidd Men, Sid and I. . . .” (2).
Throughout Stewart Pidd’s “Synthetica” essay he constantly made pronoun case errors that had to be fixed. His essay, was good, he just needed help. Now it essay of error free mistakes that will be enjoyable to read.
Stewart Pidd's Possesive Essay
Treana Penn
May 11 2009
English 201B M/W 10-12
Pidd’s Poor Possessives Nouns
In Stewart Pidd’s essay, The Land That is Ludville, he misuses the apostrophes in his possessive nouns. Possessive nouns are followed by an apostrophe -s (-’s). Both singular and plural nouns ending or not ending with a -s, must add an -’s to show possession. Except plural nouns that end in -s must add only an apostrophe (-’) to show possession. Compound Possessives rule is that if there is two possessive nouns have joint possession, add an apostrophe to the last possessive noun.
Pidd has trouble with a plural possessive noun ending in-s: “employee’s wages” (1). Pidd misplaces the apostrophe after the second -e in “employee’s”. The wages belong to the employees. The plural pronoun “employees” ends in -s. Plural pronouns that end in -s take only an apostrophe after the -s. To fix the error, Pidd needs to move the apostrophe from between the -e and -s to after the -s. The corrected noun phrase will look like this: “employees’ wages.”
Pidd also errs in punctuating possessive pronouns: “it’s retirement fund” (1). Pidd misplaces the apostrophe between the letters -t and -s in “it’s retirement fund”. The retirement fund belongs to the Fertilized Workers. The rule for possessive pronouns is to
add an -’s to show possession. To fix this error Pidd should place the apostrophe after the -s in “it’s”. The corrected phrase will look like this: “to use its’ retirement fund”.
Pidd stumbles when punctuating a singular possessive noun ending in -s: “Lois’ cruel nature” (2). He omits the letter -s from the possessive noun. The cruel nature belongs to Lois. The singular noun “Lois” end in -s. The rule for singular nouns ending in -s is to add an -’s to show possession. Pidd should fix this error by adding an -’s at the end of “Lois“. The corrected sentence will read: “ Lois’s cruel nature”.
Pidd falters when he punctuated singular possessive nouns not ending in -s: “the monkey’s tragic death” (2). After the letter -y Pidd misplaces the apostrophe. The plural pronoun “monkey’s” end in -s. The rule for singular nouns not ending in -s is to add an -’s to show possession. To repair the error Pidd must place the apostrophe after the letter -s. The corrected phrase will look like: “The monkeys’ tragic death”.
An error occurs involving a plural possessive noun ending in -s: “The Lud’s Petting Zoo” (2). Between the letters -d and -s, Pidd misplaces the apostrophe. The zoo belongs to the Luds. The plural noun “Luds” ends in -s. The plural nouns ending in -s is to add an -’s to show possession. Pidd should move the apostrophe after the -s of Lud’s to eliminate the error. The correct sentence will read: “The Luds’ petting zoo”.
Pidd incorrectly punctuates a compound possessive: “Mr. Lud and Mrs. Lud’s lives” (2). Pidd makes an error by only adding an apostrophe after one possessive noun. There are two lives that are lost. The rule for punctuating compound possessives that do not have joint possession, if the two possessive nouns do not share possession, add an
apostrophe to each possession noun. The correct sentence will read “Mr. Lud’s and Mrs. Lud’s lives.”
Pidd slips up when punctuating plural possessive nouns not ending in -s: “the couple’s infant child” (2). Pidd misplaces the apostrophe after the -s. The child belongs to the couple. The rule for plural nouns not ending in -s is to add only an apostrophe (-’) to show possession. The corrected possessive noun phrase will read: “the couples’ infant child.”
Pidd should be more careful with the way he uses his apostrophe. By him misplacing the apostrophes can confuse the reader. After Pidd places the apostrophes in the correct places his essay will be more easy to understand his “The Land That is Ludville” essay.
May 11 2009
English 201B M/W 10-12
Pidd’s Poor Possessives Nouns
In Stewart Pidd’s essay, The Land That is Ludville, he misuses the apostrophes in his possessive nouns. Possessive nouns are followed by an apostrophe -s (-’s). Both singular and plural nouns ending or not ending with a -s, must add an -’s to show possession. Except plural nouns that end in -s must add only an apostrophe (-’) to show possession. Compound Possessives rule is that if there is two possessive nouns have joint possession, add an apostrophe to the last possessive noun.
Pidd has trouble with a plural possessive noun ending in-s: “employee’s wages” (1). Pidd misplaces the apostrophe after the second -e in “employee’s”. The wages belong to the employees. The plural pronoun “employees” ends in -s. Plural pronouns that end in -s take only an apostrophe after the -s. To fix the error, Pidd needs to move the apostrophe from between the -e and -s to after the -s. The corrected noun phrase will look like this: “employees’ wages.”
Pidd also errs in punctuating possessive pronouns: “it’s retirement fund” (1). Pidd misplaces the apostrophe between the letters -t and -s in “it’s retirement fund”. The retirement fund belongs to the Fertilized Workers. The rule for possessive pronouns is to
add an -’s to show possession. To fix this error Pidd should place the apostrophe after the -s in “it’s”. The corrected phrase will look like this: “to use its’ retirement fund”.
Pidd stumbles when punctuating a singular possessive noun ending in -s: “Lois’ cruel nature” (2). He omits the letter -s from the possessive noun. The cruel nature belongs to Lois. The singular noun “Lois” end in -s. The rule for singular nouns ending in -s is to add an -’s to show possession. Pidd should fix this error by adding an -’s at the end of “Lois“. The corrected sentence will read: “ Lois’s cruel nature”.
Pidd falters when he punctuated singular possessive nouns not ending in -s: “the monkey’s tragic death” (2). After the letter -y Pidd misplaces the apostrophe. The plural pronoun “monkey’s” end in -s. The rule for singular nouns not ending in -s is to add an -’s to show possession. To repair the error Pidd must place the apostrophe after the letter -s. The corrected phrase will look like: “The monkeys’ tragic death”.
An error occurs involving a plural possessive noun ending in -s: “The Lud’s Petting Zoo” (2). Between the letters -d and -s, Pidd misplaces the apostrophe. The zoo belongs to the Luds. The plural noun “Luds” ends in -s. The plural nouns ending in -s is to add an -’s to show possession. Pidd should move the apostrophe after the -s of Lud’s to eliminate the error. The correct sentence will read: “The Luds’ petting zoo”.
Pidd incorrectly punctuates a compound possessive: “Mr. Lud and Mrs. Lud’s lives” (2). Pidd makes an error by only adding an apostrophe after one possessive noun. There are two lives that are lost. The rule for punctuating compound possessives that do not have joint possession, if the two possessive nouns do not share possession, add an
apostrophe to each possession noun. The correct sentence will read “Mr. Lud’s and Mrs. Lud’s lives.”
Pidd slips up when punctuating plural possessive nouns not ending in -s: “the couple’s infant child” (2). Pidd misplaces the apostrophe after the -s. The child belongs to the couple. The rule for plural nouns not ending in -s is to add only an apostrophe (-’) to show possession. The corrected possessive noun phrase will read: “the couples’ infant child.”
Pidd should be more careful with the way he uses his apostrophe. By him misplacing the apostrophes can confuse the reader. After Pidd places the apostrophes in the correct places his essay will be more easy to understand his “The Land That is Ludville” essay.
Stewart Pidd's Poor Be-Verbs Essay
Treana Penn
English 201b 10-12 M/w
Professor Sabir
Poor Be Verbs
The author of Stewart Pidd Hates English devote an entire section to verbs. Be verbs can not better one’s writing. Be verbs are words that combine subjects to other elements in a sentence. Be verbs are abstract (174). There are four common be-verb patterns; passive tense, expletives, passive voice and subject compliments. Authors should avoid repeating be verbs and use strong verbs creates clarity and economy. A passive voice should be used by writers for example when the receiver of the action is more important than the actor. You should get rid of the be verbs at the end of the revision process. According to Stewart Pidd’s essay “Pour Poor Porky” gives evidence by incorrectly using be verbs in the essay “Melville, the lead singer, is screaming,,,” I doubt the masters be verbs.
Pidd uses a subject complement instead of the active voice. He writes, “The death of Little Porky was Milton’s inspiration for the song ‘Too many Rats, Not Enough Cheeses’…” (1). Pidd uses the linking verb “was” and the subject complement “was” and the subject complement “his inspiration.” Pidd can replace this subject complement and the be verb with complement’s past tense verb form “inspired,” and revise the sentence to read, “The death of Little Porky inspired Milton to write the song ‘Too Many Rats, Not and Not Enough Cheese’….”
Pidd uses a subject of an expletive when he mentions the first time he hears the advertisement: “It is a Saturday when I hear the song…” (1). Pidd uses the pronoun “I” and the abstract be verb “near”. It is Pidd who can fix the error by rephrasing the sentence,
omitting the expletive structure “It is” and making the subordinating clause “when I hear” into an independent clause by removing the subordinating conjunction phrase. The revised
sentence will read, “I heard the song on Saturday….”
The progressive tense uses unnecessarily. He writes, “Melville, the Dogs’ lead singer, is screaming…” (1-2). The be verb ”is” and the present participle “screaming” Pidd uses. The be verb can be eliminated by replacing the present participle “ screaming” with its singular base form, “screams.” Pidd corrects the error by writing, “Melville, the Dogs lead singer screams….”
Passive voices uses unnecessarily by Pidd in the following quotation: “A mistake is
made by Melville…” (2). The phrase of the subject in sentence “A mistake,” but the sentence’s actor Melville. By fixing the error the be verb will be eliminated “is,” replacing the past participle “made” with its present-tense singular form “makes,” and making the object of the preposition, “by,” the subject. The sentence will revise to read, “Melville makes a mistake….
A be verb and a subject complement uses in place of an active verb: “Making a cool saying into a radio jingle is the personification of everything lame…” (2). The linking be verb “is” and the subject complement uses “the personification”. The subject complement and the be verb can be replaced with the complement’s verb form, “making a cool song.” The will read, “Making a cool song into a radio jingle personified everything lame….”
Benjamin Franklin’s quotation pertains to Pidd and his be-verb essay: “well done is better than said.” Through Stewart Pidd says he is a verb master he misuses his be verbs. Instead of Pidd using fancy talk, he should just write in his normal style. By using fancy talk Pidd will loose the point his essay. Pidd should do, rather than say, because it will create a
more understandable essay.
English 201b 10-12 M/w
Professor Sabir
Poor Be Verbs
The author of Stewart Pidd Hates English devote an entire section to verbs. Be verbs can not better one’s writing. Be verbs are words that combine subjects to other elements in a sentence. Be verbs are abstract (174). There are four common be-verb patterns; passive tense, expletives, passive voice and subject compliments. Authors should avoid repeating be verbs and use strong verbs creates clarity and economy. A passive voice should be used by writers for example when the receiver of the action is more important than the actor. You should get rid of the be verbs at the end of the revision process. According to Stewart Pidd’s essay “Pour Poor Porky” gives evidence by incorrectly using be verbs in the essay “Melville, the lead singer, is screaming,,,” I doubt the masters be verbs.
Pidd uses a subject complement instead of the active voice. He writes, “The death of Little Porky was Milton’s inspiration for the song ‘Too many Rats, Not Enough Cheeses’…” (1). Pidd uses the linking verb “was” and the subject complement “was” and the subject complement “his inspiration.” Pidd can replace this subject complement and the be verb with complement’s past tense verb form “inspired,” and revise the sentence to read, “The death of Little Porky inspired Milton to write the song ‘Too Many Rats, Not and Not Enough Cheese’….”
Pidd uses a subject of an expletive when he mentions the first time he hears the advertisement: “It is a Saturday when I hear the song…” (1). Pidd uses the pronoun “I” and the abstract be verb “near”. It is Pidd who can fix the error by rephrasing the sentence,
omitting the expletive structure “It is” and making the subordinating clause “when I hear” into an independent clause by removing the subordinating conjunction phrase. The revised
sentence will read, “I heard the song on Saturday….”
The progressive tense uses unnecessarily. He writes, “Melville, the Dogs’ lead singer, is screaming…” (1-2). The be verb ”is” and the present participle “screaming” Pidd uses. The be verb can be eliminated by replacing the present participle “ screaming” with its singular base form, “screams.” Pidd corrects the error by writing, “Melville, the Dogs lead singer screams….”
Passive voices uses unnecessarily by Pidd in the following quotation: “A mistake is
made by Melville…” (2). The phrase of the subject in sentence “A mistake,” but the sentence’s actor Melville. By fixing the error the be verb will be eliminated “is,” replacing the past participle “made” with its present-tense singular form “makes,” and making the object of the preposition, “by,” the subject. The sentence will revise to read, “Melville makes a mistake….
A be verb and a subject complement uses in place of an active verb: “Making a cool saying into a radio jingle is the personification of everything lame…” (2). The linking be verb “is” and the subject complement uses “the personification”. The subject complement and the be verb can be replaced with the complement’s verb form, “making a cool song.” The will read, “Making a cool song into a radio jingle personified everything lame….”
Benjamin Franklin’s quotation pertains to Pidd and his be-verb essay: “well done is better than said.” Through Stewart Pidd says he is a verb master he misuses his be verbs. Instead of Pidd using fancy talk, he should just write in his normal style. By using fancy talk Pidd will loose the point his essay. Pidd should do, rather than say, because it will create a
more understandable essay.
Stewart Pidd's Point of View Essay
Treana Penn
April 7, 2009
English 201B
From a Bad Point of View
Pollitt and Baker explain the basics of point of view: they define point of view as “the perspective from which one tells a story or writes an essay” (144). There is a specific way to control them, “The key to controlling point of view is choosing the correct pronoun.” (144). There are more than one type of point-of-views, “There are three point of views.” (144). Each perspective is useful for something; “The first-person point of view emphasizes the writer and is suitable for personal experience writing, the second-person point of view emphasizes the reader and is suitable for letters, and the third-person point of view places the emphasis on the subject and works best for academic writing.” (144-45). Unless instructed otherwise, “students should avoid the second-person point of view in academic writing.” (145). Writers should control their point of view, “Since so few college students can control point of view., maintaining consistency is an easy way to excel as a writer.” (144-45). He can easily fix the point-of-view shifts in his report “Ignacio Pistachio: Ludville’s Greatest Explorer”. Stewart Pidd should be able to maintain a consistence third-person point of view.
With a few minor changes, Pidd can shift his opening sentence from the first-person perspective to the third person: “we”. He states, “We all know that over two-hundred years ago Ludvilles’s greatest explorer, Ignacio Pistachio, fell off his ship. . . ” (1). Pidd misuses the first-person plural pronoun “we.” Pidd can take out the first independent clause “we all
know”. From there the remaining subordinating clause “that over. . .” can be changed into an independent by removing the subordinating conjunction “that”. The corrected sentence will read, “Over two hundred years ago Ludville’s greatest explorer, Ignacio Pistachio, fell off his ship.” (1).
Pidd can fix the next shift by simply replacing the pronoun with a plural noun. He writes, “What you don’t know is how he died.” (1). Pidd misuses the second -person pronoun “you.” Pidd can fix the error by replacing the second-person pronoun “you” with an appropriate noun “people”. The correct sentence will read “What they don’t know he is how he died” (1).
Pidd can fix his last second-person point-of-view shift , which comes in the form of an imperative. He says, “Consider this: Being lost in the primordial California wilderness did nothing to soften Pistachio’s disposition or sate his great appetite.” (2). In this paragraph, Pidd gives a command. The command Pidd gives, “consider this. . .”. In the sentence “consider this…” “you” is being implied. Pidd can fix the point of view by omitting the
imperative and replacing the implied “you” with a noun followed by the modal verb “should”. The correct sentence will read “Readers should consider this:…” (2).
Pidd can fix his first-person singular and plural point-of-view shifts by omitting the first pronoun, replacing the second pronoun and changing the question into a statement. He writes, “I wonder, should our children really be taught to celebrate such an exploitative kook?” (2). Pidd misuses the pronouns “I” and “our”. Pidd can fix the point of view shift by eliminating the first-person pronoun “I” by eliminating the independent clause “I wonder” and replace the possessive pronoun “our” with a possessive noun “Ludville’s”. Ludvile’s children should not be taught to celebrate such an exploitative kook.
Stewart Pidd should be able to maintain a consistence third-person point of view.
Pollitt and Baker explain the basics of point of view: they view a point of view as “the perspective from which one tells a story or writes an essay” (144). There is a specific way to control them, “The key to controlling point of view is choosing the correct pronoun.” (144). There are more than one type of point-of-views, “There are three point of views.” (144). Each perspective is useful for something; “The first-person point of view emphasizes the writer and is suitable for personal experience writing, the second-person point of view emphasizes the reader and is suitable for letters, and the third-person point of view places the emphasis on the subject and works best for academic writing.” (144-45). Unless instructed otherwise, “students should avoid the second-person point of view in academic writing.” (145). Writers should control their point of view, “Since so few college students can control point of view., maintaining consistency is an easy way to excel as a writer.” (144-45). He can easily fix the point-of-view shifts in his report “Ignacio Pistachio: Ludville’s Greatest Explorer”.
As Aldous Huxley says. “The only completely consistent people are completely dead”. If what Huxley says is true. Pidd is very much alive. Therefore, consistency is a rare thing among the living. Point-of-view consistency is a rare thing among beginning writers. Maintaining consistent point of view is an easy way to separate oneself from other writers. With the scarcity of consistency, writers should strive to stay with only one type of point-of-view, such as first person.
April 7, 2009
English 201B
From a Bad Point of View
Pollitt and Baker explain the basics of point of view: they define point of view as “the perspective from which one tells a story or writes an essay” (144). There is a specific way to control them, “The key to controlling point of view is choosing the correct pronoun.” (144). There are more than one type of point-of-views, “There are three point of views.” (144). Each perspective is useful for something; “The first-person point of view emphasizes the writer and is suitable for personal experience writing, the second-person point of view emphasizes the reader and is suitable for letters, and the third-person point of view places the emphasis on the subject and works best for academic writing.” (144-45). Unless instructed otherwise, “students should avoid the second-person point of view in academic writing.” (145). Writers should control their point of view, “Since so few college students can control point of view., maintaining consistency is an easy way to excel as a writer.” (144-45). He can easily fix the point-of-view shifts in his report “Ignacio Pistachio: Ludville’s Greatest Explorer”. Stewart Pidd should be able to maintain a consistence third-person point of view.
With a few minor changes, Pidd can shift his opening sentence from the first-person perspective to the third person: “we”. He states, “We all know that over two-hundred years ago Ludvilles’s greatest explorer, Ignacio Pistachio, fell off his ship. . . ” (1). Pidd misuses the first-person plural pronoun “we.” Pidd can take out the first independent clause “we all
know”. From there the remaining subordinating clause “that over. . .” can be changed into an independent by removing the subordinating conjunction “that”. The corrected sentence will read, “Over two hundred years ago Ludville’s greatest explorer, Ignacio Pistachio, fell off his ship.” (1).
Pidd can fix the next shift by simply replacing the pronoun with a plural noun. He writes, “What you don’t know is how he died.” (1). Pidd misuses the second -person pronoun “you.” Pidd can fix the error by replacing the second-person pronoun “you” with an appropriate noun “people”. The correct sentence will read “What they don’t know he is how he died” (1).
Pidd can fix his last second-person point-of-view shift , which comes in the form of an imperative. He says, “Consider this: Being lost in the primordial California wilderness did nothing to soften Pistachio’s disposition or sate his great appetite.” (2). In this paragraph, Pidd gives a command. The command Pidd gives, “consider this. . .”. In the sentence “consider this…” “you” is being implied. Pidd can fix the point of view by omitting the
imperative and replacing the implied “you” with a noun followed by the modal verb “should”. The correct sentence will read “Readers should consider this:…” (2).
Pidd can fix his first-person singular and plural point-of-view shifts by omitting the first pronoun, replacing the second pronoun and changing the question into a statement. He writes, “I wonder, should our children really be taught to celebrate such an exploitative kook?” (2). Pidd misuses the pronouns “I” and “our”. Pidd can fix the point of view shift by eliminating the first-person pronoun “I” by eliminating the independent clause “I wonder” and replace the possessive pronoun “our” with a possessive noun “Ludville’s”. Ludvile’s children should not be taught to celebrate such an exploitative kook.
Stewart Pidd should be able to maintain a consistence third-person point of view.
Pollitt and Baker explain the basics of point of view: they view a point of view as “the perspective from which one tells a story or writes an essay” (144). There is a specific way to control them, “The key to controlling point of view is choosing the correct pronoun.” (144). There are more than one type of point-of-views, “There are three point of views.” (144). Each perspective is useful for something; “The first-person point of view emphasizes the writer and is suitable for personal experience writing, the second-person point of view emphasizes the reader and is suitable for letters, and the third-person point of view places the emphasis on the subject and works best for academic writing.” (144-45). Unless instructed otherwise, “students should avoid the second-person point of view in academic writing.” (145). Writers should control their point of view, “Since so few college students can control point of view., maintaining consistency is an easy way to excel as a writer.” (144-45). He can easily fix the point-of-view shifts in his report “Ignacio Pistachio: Ludville’s Greatest Explorer”.
As Aldous Huxley says. “The only completely consistent people are completely dead”. If what Huxley says is true. Pidd is very much alive. Therefore, consistency is a rare thing among the living. Point-of-view consistency is a rare thing among beginning writers. Maintaining consistent point of view is an easy way to separate oneself from other writers. With the scarcity of consistency, writers should strive to stay with only one type of point-of-view, such as first person.
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