Friday, May 29, 2009

Narrative Essay

My Narrative Essay

Here we are in the year of 2009, During a time in the world where everything is getting more hectic. I am currently in my second semester of college. I have been able to grasp everything your not suppose to do. With everything that life throws at your way, you have to be able to adapt and roll with it. By taking English 201B I have been able to improve my skills by seeing everything I'm good at and what I need to improve.

This spring Semester was very hard compared to my first semester in Fall. Our class felt a little bit rushed, because it felt like as if it went by so fast. It seem like everything from being, sick, family being sick, people dying, school and work. Things just began to become overwhelming. I have learned after all this my way of organizing my life. It goes also for my homework assignments and my essays. I have to be able to be more focus and set goals. Because, I realize that life will not feel sorry for your circumstances.

My goal is to learn how to prepare myself for obstacles. For example, with the Stewart Pidd's Hate English, it gives you examples of process to work on essays. I appreciate things that are broken down, because you can understand everything in depth. I am not of a broad picture, I am more of sketch and rough drafts type person. In the class it was diverse and everybody felt the same way and we were able to work together. This semester will change my motivates about how I approach everything in life. That way I will always be prepared for everything that will prepare me for life.

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Pidd's Subject Verb Agreement

Treana Penn
English 201B M/W 10-12
May 16 2009

Subject-Verb Agreement Essay

The authors of Stewart Pidd Hates English devote an entire section to Subject-verb Agreements.Stewart Pidd does not have the skills to master subject-verb agreements, because he does not correctly use them. The rule for subject-verb agreements is that the sentence structure must agree. According to Stewart Pidd’s essay “Nothing Ever Changes in Ludville” gives evidence that Pidd incorrectly uses subject-verb agreements.


Pidd makes a verb before subject error. He writes, "There is rumors going around Ludville" (1). His verb and subject do not agree with each other. The rule for subject-verb agreements is that subjects must agree with their verbs. Pidd can fix this error by replacing the singular verb "is" with the plural verb "are". The correct sentence will read, "There are rumors going around Ludville".


Pidd makes a company name error. He writes, "Beaugus Properties are going to buy up the strand and build a huge resort." (1). The company name rule in the subject verb agreement are used as words are singular. Pidd can fix the sentence by removing the plural noun "are" with the singular noun "is". The correct sentence will read, "Beaugus Properties is going to buy up the strand to build a huge resort."

After reading over Stewart Pidd's essay, "Nothing Ever changes in Ludville" shows that Pidd has trouble with using his subject-verb agreements. By correcting his errors, he will find out that he could master subject-verb agreements.

Stewart Pidd's Pronoun Case Essay

Treana Penn
Professor Sabir
March 27 2009
Another Pidd Mistake

Pidd continues to make mistakes in with Pronoun cases. A pronoun case is the form that a pronoun takes to show its relationship to other words in a sentence. There are three cases: subjective, objective and possessive. He needs to change his pronoun cases with the right ones.
Stewart Pidd mistakenly uses a subjective case pronoun with a compound object. He states, “. . . Ditch wanted to come with Camper and I . . .” (1). There is not a preposition in front of “Camper and I”. The case rule for a preposition preceding a pronoun use the objective case if the pronoun follows a preposition. The pronoun “I” does not function as part of the subject. He can fix the error by replacing the subjective pronoun “I” with the correct case pronoun “me”. The correct sentence will read, “. . . Ditch wanted to come with Camper and me. . . .” (1).
Pidd does not use a case pronoun to modify an object. He states, “. . . After two of the generals attacked two of the hill drivers, Camper and I . . .” (1). The noun phrase “two of the hill drivers” functions as an object in the sentence. Pidd uses the case “ I” for the appositive that modifies the noun phrase. The pronoun used in an appositive does not have the same function as the noun it renames. He can correct the error by changing the pronoun “I” to the pronoun “me”. The correct sentence will read, “. . . After two of the Generals attacked two of the hill drivers, Camper and Me. . .” (1).
Pidd has trouble determining case with a comparison using the word “than”. He writes, “. . . Ditch was smarter than Camper and me. . .” (2). The key word that precedes the phrase “Camper and me” was, smarter. There is a comparison being made. The sentence does not make sense if Pidd finishes the sentence by writing, “me is”. Pidd can correct the sentence by using the subjective case pronouns for comparisons
using than and as. The sentence will read, “. . . Ditch was smarter than Camper and I. . . .”.
Stewart misuses the objective pronoun “me” as a part of a compound subject. He states, “. . . Me and Camper laughed hard because Ditch is probably the dumbest of the Dents. . .” (2). The subject of the sentence is “Me and Camper”. When the pronoun is part of the subject., the writer should use a subjective case. If you isolate the pronoun you want to test, your ear will often tell you if the case is incorrect. Pidd can fix the error by replacing the compound subject “Me and Camper” with a compound object “Camper and I”. The revised sentence will read, “. . . Camper and I, laughed hard because Ditch is probably the Dumbest of the Dents. . .” (2).
Pidd chose the wrong pronoun for his subject compliment. He writes, “It was he who told Ranger Encantado that I could see why she was a former Ludville Bat Guano Bay Queen” (2). Pidd uses the
Pronoun “he” for the subject compliment. The pronoun rule for the subject complement is to use subjective case pronouns for subjective complements. Pidd used a subjective case pronoun for the subject compliment. He can fix the sentence by switching the subject with the subject compliment. The sentence will now read, “ It was him that told Ranger Encantado that I could see why she was a former Ludville Bat Guano Bay Queen. . . .” (2).
Stewart Pidd makes a comparison mistake using “than” by picking the wrong pronoun case. He writes, “. . . you are almost pretty as her. . .” (2). Pidd makes a comparison in the sentence. Pidd uses the word “as” to make his comparison. He can check for the correct case when using “as” by adding a verb after the pronoun to complete the comparison. The sentence would not make sense if Pidd finished the sentence with “as pretty as her is”. To correct the sentence Pidd can replace the subjective case “her” with the objective case pronoun “she”. The revised sentence will read, “. . . you are almost as pretty as she is. . .” (2).
Pidd uses the wrong pronoun case for an appositive modifying the subject. He writes, “. . . I think I am going to ask my Pa, Sid, if the Pidd Men, Sid and me. . .” (2). The appositive “Sid and me” is modifying a subject. The case rule for modifying subjects is to use the same case for compliments as the subjects they modify. Pidd can fix the error by using the subjective case if the pronoun is modifying a subject; otherwise

use the objectives. The correct sentence will read, “. . . I think I am going to ask my Pa, Sid, if the Pidd Men, Sid and I. . . .” (2).
Throughout Stewart Pidd’s “Synthetica” essay he constantly made pronoun case errors that had to be fixed. His essay, was good, he just needed help. Now it essay of error free mistakes that will be enjoyable to read.

Stewart Pidd's Possesive Essay

Treana Penn
May 11 2009
English 201B M/W 10-12

Pidd’s Poor Possessives Nouns

In Stewart Pidd’s essay, The Land That is Ludville, he misuses the apostrophes in his possessive nouns. Possessive nouns are followed by an apostrophe -s (-’s). Both singular and plural nouns ending or not ending with a -s, must add an -’s to show possession. Except plural nouns that end in -s must add only an apostrophe (-’) to show possession. Compound Possessives rule is that if there is two possessive nouns have joint possession, add an apostrophe to the last possessive noun.
Pidd has trouble with a plural possessive noun ending in-s: “employee’s wages” (1). Pidd misplaces the apostrophe after the second -e in “employee’s”. The wages belong to the employees. The plural pronoun “employees” ends in -s. Plural pronouns that end in -s take only an apostrophe after the -s. To fix the error, Pidd needs to move the apostrophe from between the -e and -s to after the -s. The corrected noun phrase will look like this: “employees’ wages.”
Pidd also errs in punctuating possessive pronouns: “it’s retirement fund” (1). Pidd misplaces the apostrophe between the letters -t and -s in “it’s retirement fund”. The retirement fund belongs to the Fertilized Workers. The rule for possessive pronouns is to

add an -’s to show possession. To fix this error Pidd should place the apostrophe after the -s in “it’s”. The corrected phrase will look like this: “to use its’ retirement fund”.
Pidd stumbles when punctuating a singular possessive noun ending in -s: “Lois’ cruel nature” (2). He omits the letter -s from the possessive noun. The cruel nature belongs to Lois. The singular noun “Lois” end in -s. The rule for singular nouns ending in -s is to add an -’s to show possession. Pidd should fix this error by adding an -’s at the end of “Lois“. The corrected sentence will read: “ Lois’s cruel nature”.
Pidd falters when he punctuated singular possessive nouns not ending in -s: “the monkey’s tragic death” (2). After the letter -y Pidd misplaces the apostrophe. The plural pronoun “monkey’s” end in -s. The rule for singular nouns not ending in -s is to add an -’s to show possession. To repair the error Pidd must place the apostrophe after the letter -s. The corrected phrase will look like: “The monkeys’ tragic death”.
An error occurs involving a plural possessive noun ending in -s: “The Lud’s Petting Zoo” (2). Between the letters -d and -s, Pidd misplaces the apostrophe. The zoo belongs to the Luds. The plural noun “Luds” ends in -s. The plural nouns ending in -s is to add an -’s to show possession. Pidd should move the apostrophe after the -s of Lud’s to eliminate the error. The correct sentence will read: “The Luds’ petting zoo”.
Pidd incorrectly punctuates a compound possessive: “Mr. Lud and Mrs. Lud’s lives” (2). Pidd makes an error by only adding an apostrophe after one possessive noun. There are two lives that are lost. The rule for punctuating compound possessives that do not have joint possession, if the two possessive nouns do not share possession, add an
apostrophe to each possession noun. The correct sentence will read “Mr. Lud’s and Mrs. Lud’s lives.”
Pidd slips up when punctuating plural possessive nouns not ending in -s: “the couple’s infant child” (2). Pidd misplaces the apostrophe after the -s. The child belongs to the couple. The rule for plural nouns not ending in -s is to add only an apostrophe (-’) to show possession. The corrected possessive noun phrase will read: “the couples’ infant child.”
Pidd should be more careful with the way he uses his apostrophe. By him misplacing the apostrophes can confuse the reader. After Pidd places the apostrophes in the correct places his essay will be more easy to understand his “The Land That is Ludville” essay.

Stewart Pidd's Poor Be-Verbs Essay

Treana Penn
English 201b 10-12 M/w
Professor Sabir

Poor Be Verbs

The author of Stewart Pidd Hates English devote an entire section to verbs. Be verbs can not better one’s writing. Be verbs are words that combine subjects to other elements in a sentence. Be verbs are abstract (174). There are four common be-verb patterns; passive tense, expletives, passive voice and subject compliments. Authors should avoid repeating be verbs and use strong verbs creates clarity and economy. A passive voice should be used by writers for example when the receiver of the action is more important than the actor. You should get rid of the be verbs at the end of the revision process. According to Stewart Pidd’s essay “Pour Poor Porky” gives evidence by incorrectly using be verbs in the essay “Melville, the lead singer, is screaming,,,” I doubt the masters be verbs.
Pidd uses a subject complement instead of the active voice. He writes, “The death of Little Porky was Milton’s inspiration for the song ‘Too many Rats, Not Enough Cheeses’…” (1). Pidd uses the linking verb “was” and the subject complement “was” and the subject complement “his inspiration.” Pidd can replace this subject complement and the be verb with complement’s past tense verb form “inspired,” and revise the sentence to read, “The death of Little Porky inspired Milton to write the song ‘Too Many Rats, Not and Not Enough Cheese’….”
Pidd uses a subject of an expletive when he mentions the first time he hears the advertisement: “It is a Saturday when I hear the song…” (1). Pidd uses the pronoun “I” and the abstract be verb “near”. It is Pidd who can fix the error by rephrasing the sentence,
omitting the expletive structure “It is” and making the subordinating clause “when I hear” into an independent clause by removing the subordinating conjunction phrase. The revised
sentence will read, “I heard the song on Saturday….”
The progressive tense uses unnecessarily. He writes, “Melville, the Dogs’ lead singer, is screaming…” (1-2). The be verb ”is” and the present participle “screaming” Pidd uses. The be verb can be eliminated by replacing the present participle “ screaming” with its singular base form, “screams.” Pidd corrects the error by writing, “Melville, the Dogs lead singer screams….”
Passive voices uses unnecessarily by Pidd in the following quotation: “A mistake is
made by Melville…” (2). The phrase of the subject in sentence “A mistake,” but the sentence’s actor Melville. By fixing the error the be verb will be eliminated “is,” replacing the past participle “made” with its present-tense singular form “makes,” and making the object of the preposition, “by,” the subject. The sentence will revise to read, “Melville makes a mistake….
A be verb and a subject complement uses in place of an active verb: “Making a cool saying into a radio jingle is the personification of everything lame…” (2). The linking be verb “is” and the subject complement uses “the personification”. The subject complement and the be verb can be replaced with the complement’s verb form, “making a cool song.” The will read, “Making a cool song into a radio jingle personified everything lame….”
Benjamin Franklin’s quotation pertains to Pidd and his be-verb essay: “well done is better than said.” Through Stewart Pidd says he is a verb master he misuses his be verbs. Instead of Pidd using fancy talk, he should just write in his normal style. By using fancy talk Pidd will loose the point his essay. Pidd should do, rather than say, because it will create a
more understandable essay.

Stewart Pidd's Point of View Essay

Treana Penn
April 7, 2009
English 201B
From a Bad Point of View
Pollitt and Baker explain the basics of point of view: they define point of view as “the perspective from which one tells a story or writes an essay” (144). There is a specific way to control them, “The key to controlling point of view is choosing the correct pronoun.” (144). There are more than one type of point-of-views, “There are three point of views.” (144). Each perspective is useful for something; “The first-person point of view emphasizes the writer and is suitable for personal experience writing, the second-person point of view emphasizes the reader and is suitable for letters, and the third-person point of view places the emphasis on the subject and works best for academic writing.” (144-45). Unless instructed otherwise, “students should avoid the second-person point of view in academic writing.” (145). Writers should control their point of view, “Since so few college students can control point of view., maintaining consistency is an easy way to excel as a writer.” (144-45). He can easily fix the point-of-view shifts in his report “Ignacio Pistachio: Ludville’s Greatest Explorer”. Stewart Pidd should be able to maintain a consistence third-person point of view.
With a few minor changes, Pidd can shift his opening sentence from the first-person perspective to the third person: “we”. He states, “We all know that over two-hundred years ago Ludvilles’s greatest explorer, Ignacio Pistachio, fell off his ship. . . ” (1). Pidd misuses the first-person plural pronoun “we.” Pidd can take out the first independent clause “we all

know”. From there the remaining subordinating clause “that over. . .” can be changed into an independent by removing the subordinating conjunction “that”. The corrected sentence will read, “Over two hundred years ago Ludville’s greatest explorer, Ignacio Pistachio, fell off his ship.” (1).
Pidd can fix the next shift by simply replacing the pronoun with a plural noun. He writes, “What you don’t know is how he died.” (1). Pidd misuses the second -person pronoun “you.” Pidd can fix the error by replacing the second-person pronoun “you” with an appropriate noun “people”. The correct sentence will read “What they don’t know he is how he died” (1).
Pidd can fix his last second-person point-of-view shift , which comes in the form of an imperative. He says, “Consider this: Being lost in the primordial California wilderness did nothing to soften Pistachio’s disposition or sate his great appetite.” (2). In this paragraph, Pidd gives a command. The command Pidd gives, “consider this. . .”. In the sentence “consider this…” “you” is being implied. Pidd can fix the point of view by omitting the
imperative and replacing the implied “you” with a noun followed by the modal verb “should”. The correct sentence will read “Readers should consider this:…” (2).
Pidd can fix his first-person singular and plural point-of-view shifts by omitting the first pronoun, replacing the second pronoun and changing the question into a statement. He writes, “I wonder, should our children really be taught to celebrate such an exploitative kook?” (2). Pidd misuses the pronouns “I” and “our”. Pidd can fix the point of view shift by eliminating the first-person pronoun “I” by eliminating the independent clause “I wonder” and replace the possessive pronoun “our” with a possessive noun “Ludville’s”. Ludvile’s children should not be taught to celebrate such an exploitative kook.


Stewart Pidd should be able to maintain a consistence third-person point of view.
Pollitt and Baker explain the basics of point of view: they view a point of view as “the perspective from which one tells a story or writes an essay” (144). There is a specific way to control them, “The key to controlling point of view is choosing the correct pronoun.” (144). There are more than one type of point-of-views, “There are three point of views.” (144). Each perspective is useful for something; “The first-person point of view emphasizes the writer and is suitable for personal experience writing, the second-person point of view emphasizes the reader and is suitable for letters, and the third-person point of view places the emphasis on the subject and works best for academic writing.” (144-45). Unless instructed otherwise, “students should avoid the second-person point of view in academic writing.” (145). Writers should control their point of view, “Since so few college students can control point of view., maintaining consistency is an easy way to excel as a writer.” (144-45). He can easily fix the point-of-view shifts in his report “Ignacio Pistachio: Ludville’s Greatest Explorer”.
As Aldous Huxley says. “The only completely consistent people are completely dead”. If what Huxley says is true. Pidd is very much alive. Therefore, consistency is a rare thing among the living. Point-of-view consistency is a rare thing among beginning writers. Maintaining consistent point of view is an easy way to separate oneself from other writers. With the scarcity of consistency, writers should strive to stay with only one type of point-of-view, such as first person.

Stewart Pidd's Synthetica Essay

Treana Penn
Professor Sabir
March 27 2009
Stewart Pidd mistakenly uses a subjective case pronoun with a compound object. He states, “. . . Ditch wanted to come with Camper and I . . .” (1). There is not a preposition in front of “Camper and I”. The case rule for a preposition preceding a pronoun use the objective case if the pronoun follows a preposition. The pronoun “I” does not function as part of the subject. He can fix the error by replacing the subjective pronoun “I” with the correct case pronoun “me”. The correct sentence will read, “. . . Ditch wanted to come with Camper and me. . . .” (1).
Pidd does not use a case pronoun to modify an object. He states, “. . . After two of the generals attacked two of the hill drivers, Camper and I . . .” (1). The noun phrase “two of the hill drivers” functions as an object in the sentence. Pidd uses the case “ I” for the appositive that modifies the noun phrase. The pronoun used in an appositive does not have the same function as the noun it renames. He can correct the error by changing the pronoun “I” to the pronoun “me”. The correct sentence will read, “. . . After two of the Generals attacked two of the hill drivers, Camper and Me. . .” (1).
Pidd has trouble determining case with a comparison using the word “than”. He writes, “. . . Ditch was smarter than Camper and me. . .” (2). The key word that precedes the phrase “Camper and me” was, smarter. There is a comparison being made. The sentence does not make sense if Pidd finishes the sentence by writing, “me is”. Pidd can correct the sentence by using the subjective case pronouns for comparisons using than and as. The sentence will read, “. . . Ditch was smarter than Camper and I. . . .”.
Stewart misuses the objective pronoun “me” as a part of a compound subject. He states, “. . . Me and Camper laughed hard because Ditch is probably the dumbest of the Dents. . .” (2). The subject of the sentence is “Me and Camper”. When the pronoun is part of the subject., the writer should use a subjective case. If you isolate the pronoun you want to test, your ear will often tell you if the case is incorrect. Pidd can fix the error by replacing the compound subject “Me and Camper” with a compound object “Camper and I”. The revised sentence will read, “. . . Camper and I, laughed hard because Ditch is probably the Dumbest of the Dents. . .” (2).
Pidd chose the wrong pronoun for his subject compliment. He writes, “It was he who told Ranger Encantado that I could see why she was a former Ludville Bat Guano Bay Queen” (2). Pidd uses the
Pronoun “he” for the subject compliment. The pronoun rule for the subject complement is to use subjective case pronouns for subjective complements. Pidd used a subjective case pronoun for the subject compliment. He can fix the sentence by switching the subject with the subject compliment. The sentence will now read, “ It was him that told Ranger Encantado that I could see why she was a former Ludville Bat Guano Bay Queen. . . .” (2).
Stewart Pidd makes a comparison mistake using “than” by picking the wrong pronoun case. He writes, “. . . you are almost pretty as her. . .” (2). Pidd makes a comparison in the sentence. Pidd uses the word “as” to make his comparison. He can check for the correct case when using “as” by adding a verb after the pronoun to complete the comparison. The sentence would not make sense if Pidd finished the sentence with “as pretty as her is”. To correct the sentence Pidd can replace the subjective case “her” with the objective case pronoun “she”. The revised sentence will read, “. . . you are almost as pretty as she is. . .” (2).
Pidd uses the wrong pronoun case for an appositive modifying the subject. He writes, “. . . I think I am going to ask my Pa, Sid, if the Pidd Men, Sid and me. . .” (2). The appositive “Sid and me” is modifying a subject. The case rule for modifying subjects is to use the same case for compliments as the subjects they modify. Pidd can fix the error by using the subjective case if the pronoun is modifying a subject; otherwise use the objectives. The correct sentence will read, “. . . I think I am going to ask my Pa, Sid, if the Pidd Men, Sid and I. . . .” (2).

Stewart Pidd's Point of View Essay

Treana Penn
April 7, 2009
English 201B
From a Bad Point of View
Pollitt and Baker explain the basics of point of view: they define point of view as “the perspective from which one tells a story or writes an essay” (144). There is a specific way to control them, “The key to controlling point of view is choosing the correct pronoun.” (144). There are more than one type of point-of-views, “There are three point of views.” (144). Each perspective is useful for something; “The first-person point of view emphasizes the writer and is suitable for personal experience writing, the second-person point of view emphasizes the reader and is suitable for letters, and the third-person point of view places the emphasis on the subject and works best for academic writing.” (144-45). Unless instructed otherwise, “students should avoid the second-person point of view in academic writing.” (145). Writers should control their point of view, “Since so few college students can control point of view., maintaining consistency is an easy way to excel as a writer.” (144-45). He can easily fix the point-of-view shifts in his report “Ignacio Pistachio: Ludville’s Greatest Explorer”. Stewart Pidd should be able to maintain a consistence third-person point of view.
With a few minor changes, Pidd can shift his opening sentence from the first-person perspective to the third person: “we”. He states, “We all know that over two-hundred years ago Ludvilles’s greatest explorer, Ignacio Pistachio, fell off his ship. . . ” (1). Pidd misuses the first-person plural pronoun “we.” Pidd can take out the first independent clause “we all
know”. From there the remaining subordinating clause “that over. . .” can be changed into an independent by removing the subordinating conjunction “that”. The corrected sentence will read, “Over two hundred years ago Ludville’s greatest explorer, Ignacio Pistachio, fell off his ship.” (1).
Pidd can fix the next shift by simply replacing the pronoun with a plural noun. He writes, “What you don’t know is how he died.” (1). Pidd misuses the second -person pronoun “you.” Pidd can fix the error by replacing the second-person pronoun “you” with an appropriate noun “people”. The correct sentence will read “What they don’t know he is how he died” (1).
Pidd can fix his last second-person point-of-view shift , which comes in the form of an imperative. He says, “Consider this: Being lost in the primordial California wilderness did nothing to soften Pistachio’s disposition or sate his great appetite.” (2). In this paragraph, Pidd gives a command. The command Pidd gives, “consider this. . .”. In the sentence “consider this…” “you” is being implied. Pidd can fix the point of view by omitting the
imperative and replacing the implied “you” with a noun followed by the modal verb “should”. The correct sentence will read “Readers should consider this:…” (2).
Pidd can fix his first-person singular and plural point-of-view shifts by omitting the first pronoun, replacing the second pronoun and changing the question into a statement. He writes, “I wonder, should our children really be taught to celebrate such an exploitative kook?” (2). Pidd misuses the pronouns “I” and “our”. Pidd can fix the point of view shift by eliminating the first-person pronoun “I” by eliminating the independent clause “I wonder” and replace the possessive pronoun “our” with a possessive noun “Ludville’s”. Ludvile’s children should not be taught to celebrate such an exploitative kook.


Stewart Pidd should be able to maintain a consistence third-person point of view.
Pollitt and Baker explain the basics of point of view: they view a point of view as “the perspective from which one tells a story or writes an essay” (144). There is a specific way to control them, “The key to controlling point of view is choosing the correct pronoun.” (144). There are more than one type of point-of-views, “There are three point of views.” (144). Each perspective is useful for something; “The first-person point of view emphasizes the writer and is suitable for personal experience writing, the second-person point of view emphasizes the reader and is suitable for letters, and the third-person point of view places the emphasis on the subject and works best for academic writing.” (144-45). Unless instructed otherwise, “students should avoid the second-person point of view in academic writing.” (145). Writers should control their point of view, “Since so few college students can control point of view., maintaining consistency is an easy way to excel as a writer.” (144-45). He can easily fix the point-of-view shifts in his report “Ignacio Pistachio: Ludville’s Greatest Explorer”.
As Aldous Huxley says. “The only completely consistent people are completely dead”. If what Huxley says is true. Pidd is very much alive. Therefore, consistency is a rare thing among the living. Point-of-view consistency is a rare thing among beginning writers. Maintaining consistent point of view is an easy way to separate oneself from other writers. With the scarcity of consistency, writers should strive to stay with only one type of point-of-view, such as first person.

Stewart Pidd's Puctuation Essay

Treana Penn
Professor Sabir
English 201B
21 February 2009
Skating Through Pidd’s Bad Punctuations
In order to punctuate sentences correctly writers must understand certain rules and concepts. A clause is a group of words, containing a subject and a predicate, making a complete sentence. There are two types of clauses a subordinate clause and an independent clause. The difference between an independent clause and a subordinate clause, is that only an independent clause can stand alone. A phrase is a group of words not containing both a subject and a verb. Three comma sentence punctuation errors are comma splices, run-on sentences and fragment sentences. A fragment is not a phrase or a subordinate clause punctuated as a sentence. When a word group containing two or more independent clauses without a proper punctuation separating them, they are called a run-on sentence. A comma splice is a punctuation error that consist of two independent clauses punctuated with only a comma. Stewart Pidd deserves a “D” on his paper “Skating Rules” , because he does not properly punctuate his sentences.
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. He writes, “ Skating rules and I rock.” The mistake occurs between the words “rules” and “and.” Pidd has failed to punctuate two independent clauses. “Skating rules” and “I rock”, joined together with a coordinating conjunction. He can ix this error by separating the two independent clauses. He can add a comma after the first independent clause or replace the coordinating conjunction with a semicolon or a period.
Pidd makes a sentence fragment error. He writes, “If I skate. I win.” Pidd punctuates the subordinate clause “If I skate. I win” with only a comma. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into a subordinate clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction “If.”
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes, “His little step-by-step system for learning” as a sentence. He can fix this error by connecting the phrase to a nearby sentence with a comma. Pidd must make the phrase a subject and add a predicate to convert the phrase.
Pidd makes a fragment error. He writes, “When he canters out to his corvette”. Pidd punctuates the subordinating clause “when he canters out to his corvette” with only a period. He can fix this error by connecting the subordinate clause to the independent clause or by converting it into an independent clause. To connect the clause Pidd needs to omit the period after the subordinate clause or replace it with a comma. He can convert the subordinate clause into an independent clause by eliminating the subordinating conjunction “when.”
Pidd makes a run-on sentence error. He writes “I found this sick arrowhead and I will stick it, into one of his low-profile tires.” The mistake occurs between the words “arrow” and “I”. Pidd has failed to punctuate two independent clauses “I found this stick arrowhead” and “It will stick it into one of his low-profile tires.” He can fix this error by separating the two independent clauses to separate the two clauses he can by adding a comma after the first independent clauses.
Stewart Pidd deserves a “D” on his paper “Skating Rules” because he makes many sentence punctuation errors. Pidd’s failure to correctly punctuate sentences is the reason why he does not deserve a passing grade. Instead of making fun of Coach T’s lame English class, Pidd should follow Coach T’s little step-by-step system for learning. Throughout Pidd’s paper, he did not correctly punctuate his paper costing him a failing grade.

DREAMS FROM MY FATHER VOCAB


Barack Obama: Dreams From My Father Vocabulary Words

chapter 1

1) Gaunt (adj): extremely thin and bony

2) Pali (n): (in Hawaii) a steep slope or cliff

3) Bequeathed (v): to hand down; pass on

4) Miscegenation (n): interbreeding between members of different races

5) Sinewy (adj): of or like sinews; tough, firm, braided, or resilient

6) Octoroon (n): a person having one-eighth black ancestry; the offspring of a quadroon and a white

7) Mirthless (adj): devoid of gladness

8) Puffery (n): exaggerated phrase


chapter 2

1) Jitneys (n): a small bus or car following a regular route along which it picks up and discharges passengers, originally charging each passenger five cents

2) Wiry (adj): in the form of wire

3) Petered (v): To become exhausted

4) Animist (n): the belief that natural objects, natural phenomena, and the universe itself possess souls

5) Demagogue (n): a person, esp. an orator or political leader, who gains power and popularity by arousing the emotions, passions, and prejudices of the people

6) Dysentery (n): diarrhea

7) Rebuff (n): a blunt or abrupt rejection, as of a person making advances


Chapter 3

1) Hoarding: a temporary board fence put about a building being erected or repaired —called also hoard

2) Menacing: to make a show of intention to harm

3) Convergence: the merging of distinct technologies, industries, or devices into a unified whole

4) Reprimand: a severe or formal reproof

5) Cannibalism: the usually ritualistic eating of human flesh by a human being

6) Unearthed: to dig up out of or as if out of the earth





Chapter 5 &6

1)Warbling: to sing in a trilling manner or with many turns and variations

2) Moralism: an often exaggerated emphasis on morality

3) Incurable: not likely to be changed or corrected

4) Cesspool: an underground reservoir for liquid waste (as household sewage)

5) Paramilitary: relating to, being, or characteristic of a force formed on a military pattern

6) Servitude: a condition in which one lacks liberty especially to determine one's course of action or way of life

7) Waffling: to talk or write foolishly

8) Eloquent: marked by forceful and fluent expression

9) Homilies: a usually short sermon

10) Expedient: suitable for achieving a particular end in a given circumstance

11) Unanchored: not having a firm basis or foundation

12) Reefer: one that reefs

13) Bile: inclination to anger

14) Tenements: a house used as a dwelling

15) Monsoons: rainfall that is associated with the monsoon

16) Guileless: innocent




Chapter 7

1) Intermittently: coming and going at intervals : not continuous

2) Debris: the remains of something broken down or destroyed

3) Trodden: to walk or proceed along

4) Perpetual: continuing forever


5) Promenade: to walk about in or on

6) Moorings: an act of making fast a boat or aircraft with lines or anchors

7) Grizzled: sprinkled or streaked with gray

8) Hemorrhage: a copious discharge of blood from the blood vessels

9) Indeterminate: having an infinite number of solution

10) Boisterous: marked by or expressive of exuberance and high spirits

11) Bespoke: dealing in or producing custom-made articles

12) Alderman: a person governing a kingdom, district, or shire as viceroy for an Anglo-Saxon king

13) Archdiocese: the diocese of an archbishop

14) Desolation: barren wasteland




Chapter 8

1) Solemn: marked by the invocation of a religious sanction

2) Sustain: to give support or relief to

3) Subcompact: an automobile smaller than a compact

4) Leaflet: one of the divisions of a compound leaf

5) Betel nut: the astringent seed of the betel palm

6) Obsolete: no longer in use or no longer useful

7) Elongated: to extend the length of



Chapter 9

1) Botched: to put together in a makeshift way

2) Assortment: a collection of assorted things or persons

3) Pry: to look closely or inquisitively ; also : to make a nosy or presumptuous inquiry

4) Patronage: the support or influence of a patron

5) Merited: to be worthy of or entitled or liable to

6) Bungalows: a one-storied house with a low-pitched roof ; also : a house having one and a half stories and usually a front porch

7) Solicitude: the state of being concerned and anxious





Chapter 10

1) Sporadic: occurring occasionally, singly, or in irregular or random instances

2) Renovating: to restore to a former better state

3) Immediacy: the quality or state of being immediate

4) Luminous: emitting or reflecting usually steady, suffused, or glowing light

5) Exasperated: to cause irritation or annoyance to

6) Catchall: something that holds or includes odds and ends or a wide variety of things

7) Inculcate: to teach and impress by frequent repetitions or admonitions

8) Regress: an act or the privilege of going or coming back

9) Pestilence: something that is destructive or pernicious

10) Afoot: on foot

11) Hobbesian: of or relating to the English philosopher Thomas Hobbes or Hobbism

12) Quarrels: a square-headed bolt or arrow especially for a crossbow

13) Corporeal: having, consisting of, or relating to a physical material body

14) Eroded: to diminish or destroy by degrees

15) Legerdemain: a display of skill or adroitness

16) Indissoluble: incapable of being annulled, undone, or broken

17) Delusion: the act of deluding : the state of being deluded

18) Waning: to fall gradually from power, prosperity, or influence





Chapter 11

1) Exuberant: joyously unrestrained and enthusiastic

2) Gutted: to extract all the essential passages or portions from

3) Puzzlement: puzzled

4) Voluminous: consisting of many folds, coils, or convolutions

5) Industrialists: one owning or engaged in the management of an industry : manufacturer

6) Redistributed: to spread to other areas

7) Apprehensive: viewing the future with anxiety or alarm

8) Filch: to appropriate furtively or casually

9) Emulate: to strive to equal or excel

10) Giddy: lightheartedly silly

11) Succumbing: to be brought to an end (as death) by the effect of destructive or disruptive forces

12) Vigor: active bodily or mental strength or force




Chapter 12

1) Heeler: one that heels

2) Coup: a brilliant, sudden, and usually highly successful stroke or act

3) Wading: to pass or cross by wading

4) Phalanx: a body of troops in close array

5) Jockeyed: to deal shrewdly or fraudulently with





COVER PAGE


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Treana Penn
9437 Sunnyside St, 3,Oakland, CA, 94603
510-355-4427
Treanapenn@sbcglobal.net
English 201B

Social Entrepreneur Research Essay

Sources/Cites:

1) Beach, Wendy. "The Omega Boys Club: Changing Boys to Men." The Philadelphia Tribune 113(1996): 12. Print.

2) Taylor, Donald. "Joe Marshall: Formative Father Figure." Essence 23(1993): 48. Print.

3) Marshall Jr., Wheeler, Connie, Dr. Joseph. Street Soldiers. Delta Corte Press, 1996. Print

4) "Street Soldiers: Omega Boys Club." Omega Boys Club 2007 Web.April 27, 2009. .

5) "Dr. Joseph Marshall: Treating the Violence Virus." Cbs Broadcasting Inc. Web.April 27 2009. .

6) "Martin Luther Ling Jr. Celebrations." Cbs Interactive Inc. 2009 Web.27 April 2009. .

7) "News From the Mission Cape Town, South Africa." Us Department of State 29 March 2009 Web.27 April 2009. .

8) Exodus Online 2 May 1998 Web.6 May 2009. .



Outline:
Treana Penn
English 201B M/W 10-12
Professor Sabir
Local Social Entrepreneur Planning Sheet

1.The social entrepreneur that is being identified in my community is Dr. Joseph E. Marshall Jr.

2.Doctor E. Marshall has identified the female and male youth risk of becoming dead or incarcerated.

3.The name of the organization that was started is Omegas Boy’s Club located in San Francisco, Ca.

4.Omega Boy’s Club reaches out towards the community creating a family type environment.

5.They decided to address this issue because they wanted to increase the youth to stay ‘Alive and Free’.

6.The community owns this process by continuing to join or to tell others about the good of the organization.

7.The local component is by the city helping Omega Boy’s Club stay funded by connecting with different organizations and the city.






Draft:
Treana Penn
English 201B
May 20 2009

A Social Entrepreneur: Dr. Joseph Marshall
The youth of the Bay Area has a higher rate of being dead or in jail than being 'Alive and Free'. Dr. Joseph Marshall Jr. a social entrepreneur of San Francisco, CA. He felt the need to give back to his community by starting a nonprofit organization for the youth. An organization for youth where they can have a safe environment to hang out while learning to be successful at the same time. Social entrepreneurs are people that point out a problem in their community and start up their own business to change the social problem. Social entrepreneurs are dedicated to fixing the problem(s) of their community with a vision of a better future. Dr. Marshall jr. Took on the role of being social entrepreneur to improve his own community.

Dr. Joseph Marshall jr. Has taken the responsibility to give back to his community by starting a nonprofit organization for the youth. It is said that we are a product of our environment, Dr. marshall grew up in a single mother home in the rough area of Los Angeles. One day he picked up a book about Malcolm X and read what it had to offer his brain. The words of Malcolm X inspired and changed his thinking process causing him to look at life more optimistically. He refers that book to every man he meets, because he feels it is for every man to learn from. It even inspired him to write his own book, Street Soldier: One Man's Struggle to Save a Generation, one Life at a Time.

After his life epiphany he went onto the college world receiving many degrees. He gained; a B.A in Political Science and Sociology from the University of San Francisco, Ca M.A in Education from San Francisco State University, a Ph D in Psychology from the Wright Institute in Berkeley, Ca. He also received Honorary Doctorate of Humane Letters from Morehouse College and University of San Francisco. Dr. Marshall has one son that he teaches that everybody's life is important. Father and child relationship and male role models are important another reason for Omegas Boys Club. He was employed as a teacher and administrator for 25 years of San Francisco Unifed School District.

The organization was founded in February 1987 by Dr. Marshall and Jack Jacqua. This current generation has been lost and Dr. Marshall and Jack has been on a mission to find it and restore it. Omega Boys Club started out with just boys and later on in the years girls began to be involved in the movement Omega Boys Club lives by motto to ‘stay Alive and Free’. There is no member or no fees to be apart of the Omegas Boys Club, it is a free program. They hold Leadership Academy classes consisting math and literature every Tuesday from 5:30-8:00pm and family meetings from 8:30-10:00pm Omega’s goal is to keep the youth in school and to be aware of anything that will stop them from doing so. Omega’s Boys Club is also a scholarship program, over the past years they have sent 141 Omega Students to different colleges and they all graduated. Every student that graduated, somebody from Omega was there to capture that moment. There are many trainers available to teach social and employment skills.

Many people have experienced and heard how Omegas Boy Club has affected many people in the San Francisco, Bay Area. There has been said many people who wished there was an Omega Boys Club in their own city or State. Dr. Marshall and the staff of Omega expands as much as possible by teaching everything they teach in Leadership Classes to Elementary and Middle School classes. “Coach” Wilburn Jigetts spread so much wisdom before he passed in 2003 “the more you know, the more you owe” is one of his coachism that would represent what Omega is. Coach Jiggetts was the elder of The Omega family, like the grandfather, every year Omega celebrates his life with a memorial celebration. The Omega team has traveled the world to share the works of being “Alive and Free”. Omega has done its job by making an impact in its community to keep the youth “Alive and Free”. Yet, in reality there job is not done, because their plan is to keep the movement going on forever. Omega has not decreased the rate of violence, but it has increased the knowledge of the consequences of violence. Many people have participated in Omega keeping youth and adults out of street decreasing the statistic rate in San Francisco area, bay area. My life has personally changed from Omega. I have taken the Leadership classes, that has given me a different aspect on life on the way I handle every day situations. Out of all the programs that Omega had to offer the Black College Tour that they paid half for. I was able to visit the college of my dreams that I always told Dr. Marshall about. We were able to meet new people, have fun, and learn black history. Dr. Marshall told me that If “I claim something as mine it will be mine”, so I claimed Clark Atlanta University to be my school that I transfer to. The leaders of Omega teach us respect and I have nothing, but respect for everybody in the Omega family.

A Social Entrepreneur is a person who realizes the issues in their community. They find solutions to the problems by creating businesses that can help the issues. The businesses are usually non-profit, because they are more concerned for the change and not the money. No pun intended. Dr. Marshall has fit these categories of being a social entrepreneur by creating Omega Boys Club. Dr. Marshall is a role to his community and his idea will live on forever.



Final draft:

Treana Penn
English 201B
May 20 2009

A Social Entrepreneur: Dr. Joseph Marshall

The youth of the Bay Area has a higher rate of being dead or in jail than being 'Alive and Free'. Dr. Joseph Marshall Jr. a social entrepreneur of San Francisco, CA. He felt the need to give back to his community by starting a nonprofit organization for the youth. An organization for youth where they can have a safe environment to hang out while learning to be successful at the same time. Social entrepreneurs are people that point out a problem in their community and start up their own business to change the social problem. Social entrepreneurs are dedicated to fixing the problem(s) of their community with a vision of a better future. Dr. Marshall jr. Took on the role of being social entrepreneur to improve his own community.

Dr. Joseph Marshall jr. Has taken the responsibility to give back to his community by starting a nonprofit organization for the youth. It began when doctor Marshall was in his last years of high school, when he was going to give up on his life and drop out of high school. It is said that we are a product of our environment, Dr. marshall grew up in a single mother home in the rough area of Los Angeles. One day he picked up a book about Malcolm X and read what it had to offer his brain. The words of Malcolm X inspired and changed his thinking process causing him to look at life more optimistically. He refers that book to every man he meets, because he feels it is for every man to learn from. It even inspired him to write his own book, Street Soldier: One Man's Struggle to Save a Generation, one Life at a Time.

After his life epiphany he went onto the college world receiving many degrees. He gained; a B.A in Political Science and Sociology from the University of San Francisco, Ca M.A in Education from San Francisco State University, a Ph D in Psychology from the Wright Institute in Berkeley, Ca. He also received Honorary Doctorate of Humane Letters from Morehouse College and University of San Francisco. Dr. Marshall has one son that he teaches that everybody's life is important. Father and child relationship and male role models are important another reason for Omegas Boys Club. He was employed as a teacher and administrator for 25 years of San Francisco Unifed School District.

The organization was founded in February 1987 by Dr. Marshall and Jack Jacqua. Omega was made to decrease the high rate of inner city youth either dropping out of school, dying or being in jail. It has been recently dated that by race, those who are incarcerated; 43.9% black, 18.26% Hispanic, 34.72% white, and 3.11% other. By population; 12.32% black, 12.55% Hispanic, 69.13% white, and 6% other. Every day youth ages from 16-24 mainly minorities end up dead or in jail. This current generation has been lost and Dr. Marshall and Jack has been on a mission to find it and restore it. Omega Boys Club started out with just boys and later on in the years girls began to be involved in the movement Omega Boys Club lives by motto to ‘stay Alive and Free’. There is no member or no fees to be apart of the Omegas Boys Club, it is a free program. They hold Leadership Academy classes consisting math and literature every Tuesday from 5:30-8:00pm and family meetings from 8:30-10:00pm Omega’s goal is to keep the youth in school and to be aware of anything that will stop them from doing so. Omega’s Boys Club is also a scholarship program, over the past years they have sent 141 Omega Students to different colleges and they all graduated. Every student that graduated, somebody from Omega was there to capture that moment. There are many trainers available to teach social and employment skills.

Many people have experienced and heard how Omegas Boy Club has affected many people in the San Francisco, Bay Area. There has been said many people who wished there was an Omega Boys Club in their own city or State. Dr. Marshall and the staff of Omega expands as much as possible by teaching everything they teach in Leadership Classes to Elementary and Middle School classes. “Coach” Wilburn Jigetts spread so much wisdom before he passed in 2003 “the more you know, the more you owe” is one of his coachism that would represent what Omega is. Coach Jiggetts was the elder of The Omega family, like the grandfather, every year Omega celebrates his life with a memorial celebration. The Omega team has traveled the world to share the works of being “Alive and Free”. The organization continues to grow by networking with the city and some foundations that are non profit as well and fundraisers to keep the program funded. Omega also continues to grows by what is called their voice, “Street Soldiers”, a radio show hosted by Dr. Marshall and Lady Estell every Sunday night at eight pm, on 106.1 fm. There are 13 radio stations that affiliate with Omega radio station, because they believe in Omega’s Goal.

Omega has done its job by making an impact in its community to keep the youth “Alive and Free”. Yet, in reality there job is not done, because their plan is to keep the movement going on forever. Omega has not decreased the rate of violence, but it has increased the knowledge of the consequences of violence. Many people have participated in Omega keeping youth and adults out of street decreasing the statistic rate in San Francisco area, bay area. My life has personally changed from Omega. I have taken the Leadership classes, that has given me a different aspect on life on the way I handle every day situations. Out of all the programs that Omega had to offer the Black College Tour that they paid half for. I was able to visit the college of my dreams that I always told Dr. Marshall about. We were able to meet new people, have fun, and learn black history. Dr. Marshall told me that If “I claim something as mine it will be mine”, so I claimed Clark Atlanta University to be my school that I transfer to. The leaders of Omega teach us respect and I have nothing, but respect for everybody in the Omega family.

A Social Entrepreneur is a person who realizes the issues in their community. They find solutions to the problems by creating businesses that can help the issues. The businesses are usually non-profit, because they are more concerned for the change and not the money. No pun intended. Dr. Marshall has fit these categories of being a social entrepreneur by creating Omega Boys Club. Dr. Marshall is a role to his community and his idea will live on forever. The benefit of social entrepreneurs they work on change for change and not the money.

Free Writes

Treana Penn
English 201B
10-12 M/W


Freewrite: I Need Love by LL Cool J

This whole experience has been such a revelation

It's taught me love and how to be a real man

To always be considerate and do all I can

Protect you you're my lady and you mean so much

My body tingles all over from the slightest touch


These four stanzas of, I Need Love, stood out the most to me. In the month, where "Love" has its own day, this song matches perfectly with the theme of Valentine's Day. When LL Cool J, uses the word revelation describing Love, that shows it means a lot to him. Love means the same to me as it does to him wether it is good or bad love. Love is a learning process that starts off from learning from relationships. Relationships with yourself, family, girlfriend, boyfriend, work, friends etc,. Every girl always wants the perfect girl just like boys want their perfect girl. But everybody knows, even LL Cool J realizes, that is just living in a fantasy world to be able to get that. Everything that he wrote, is something that I can relate to with love. Also, everything he saying is something that I appreciate in a man. A man being a man, but yet with a sensitive side.
7:23 PM



Treana Penn
April 6, 2009
Professor Sabir
Obama’s Forgiveness

Barack Obama grew up in a single parent home without his father in his life. While he was growing up he only had a couple of encounters with his father. Those couple times he left as quickly as he would come around. He also dealt with his parents being an interracial couple making things more complicated. Obama has not gotten over the fact that his dad was in the picture teaching him how to be a man. Even though, Obama has had his grandma and a family friend show him the ropes out of the kindness of their heart.



Paraphrasing

By paraphrasing another author's words it shows that you understand their their opinions. Understanding their words enough, that you can write it in your own words without changing the meaning of the sentences. If you are not paraphrasing then you are plagiarizing
the writer's work, word by word which is illegal. Or people try to get away with plagiarism by replacing the author's words with similar words that mean the same thing. There is also Literal paraphrasing, when you replace the author's words and phrase, but the sentence structure stays the same.



Stewart pidd

I feel that Stewart Pidd Hates English is a great way to refresh our English skills. Even though, it looks like easy tasks for an elementary students. It is material that as elementary school we majority of the time do not remember way back then everything what we have learned. I know it will help me and the rest of my classmates with our basic English.


Dear Ms Sabir,

This is my second semester of being enrolled in College of Alameda. Also my second semester of being in your English Class, this time I passed 201A with a B into 201B. In the beginning, of last semester I did not respond to the post at first. In the end I started to realize how important it was to commit to every single thing. Your spring of 2009 letter for this semester's English class is very different, very long still, but different. Because, I did not realize how much you were involved with children and helped volunteer for community programs. It really shows how you are serious about helping us as well. Even though, you are a professor that is use to dealing with children, I appreciate that you treat us like the adults we are instead of children.

I don't understand how you were able to graduate from high school at the age of fifteen. The only person I think who did that was Martin Luther King Jr. or he graduated from college at fifteen. Either one of the two. I was wondering how that was even possible to accomplish. I will probally find that out later.

I must admit that 201A was a challenge. The 201A was challenging to my self skills, knowledge, maturity, concentration and my goals. I always loved writing, just did not know how to process out my writings. I used to receive low grades in high school. Which I brought over to College starting off with a D in the middle of the semester. Then putting fort more effort and time. I passed your class with a B that gave me more confidence in myself.




Treana Penn
English 201B
M/W 10-12

Love Your Enemies

Martin Luther King Jr says, "this command is an absolute necessity for the survival of our civilization. Yes, it is love that will save our world and our civilization, love even for enemies." (1). I feel love is a struggle, especially when it comes to loving an enemy or enemies. In this essay, Martin Luther King explains, love is an important factor of live to make it through this world. King feels that we must love our enemies, because we are all God's children. So that same person who could possibly be an enemy, could also possibly be God's child, too. His blueprint to loving an enemy may seem difficult to understand, but it is to " Love yourself". By looking at everything your enemy may dislike you for and find the beauty of it that is inside yourself. I think that President Barack Obama lives by Martin Luther Kings sermons and words. Because, he has lived King's speech of change, by becoming the first African American President. As Obama quotes, ""There's not a liberal America and a conservative America; there is the United States of America. There's not a black America and a white America and Latino America and Asian America; there is the United States of America," (Obama, 2004) showing his love for everyone and not discriminating as an enemy would do.



Treana Penn

M/W 10-11:50



“Wear Clean Draws”



In the song, Wear Clean Draws, a line is quoted that my step mom repeats to me constantly over and over that sticks with me as a young adult. She always tells me to stay prepared, so that you do not have to get ready. To me that quote she tells me relates to the song, “Wear Clean Draws”, because it talks about staying ready for any obstacle thrown your way. The reason it sticks in my head is that at times I do procrastinate and the quote prevents me from procrastinating in life. It is relevant to when he says “Wear Clean Draws”, because you might end up in any situation. The statement is like a metaphor. By wearing clean draws is like being fresh, prepared and clean. For example, if you have on clean draws and some how end up in a concussion, at least you will know that the person is clean and takes care of themselves. So if you make the decision to wear clean draws, you will be able to be prepared for any situation.




Treana Penn

M/W 10-11:50





1/20/09 A Day of a New Day



On January 20, 2009, I walked into twenty days after the year of 2008, realizing that the changes in my life were just at its peak point. The night before, I prepared for the anxious day of the inauguration of a new President. I drew a picture of President Barack Obama on the back of one of my favorite shirts, with a favorite quote of mine that he said. The quote basically saying that, America is America and we are all as a people united. I ironed my shirt, ate my breakfast, I watched the beginning of the inauguration on television with my step dad anxiously, before I went on my way to school. The day of the inauguration, there were people every where heading to different events, people of every race coming together as one witness change. As I took the Bart to school I realized looking around at every one sitting in the seats. What if the Bart was segregated? What if women could not vote? What if I did not have the right to speak out about my feelings? I would not be able to go to school, to learn or either to vote. Those are privileges that I value.



As I got to school, I wore my shirt with President Obama in the back of it with pride. I felt proud to speak out loud in school and to appreciate my education. President Obama becoming elected was not a shock to me, the time frame of it being in my lifetime was shocking. The year I was able to register vote, I voted for a President that came along and created a new stereotype for African-Americans. I feel that a change starts in an individual and if every individual makes changes for the better. The world can slowly see a brighter day.

Extra Credit Essay: Grade A+

Treana Penn
Afram. Family Issues
May 16 2009

Black Families in the Spotlight

The media, is a world where everything is broad casted through televisions, radios, internet, articles, etc. People who work for the media majority of the time personally pick and choose the things that they want to be broadcasted. African Americans are usually depicted in the bad light of the media world. The portrayal of Black Families are racially biased when displayed in the media. As black and black families continued to be allowed to be exploited in the media, it gives people reasons to create negative stereotypes. Those stereotypes makes it believable that is the blueprint of all African-Americans.

Currently there is a new face of Black Families in the media. The only good family that were shown on television were, the Cosby Show and Parent Hood. Now a days we do not here or see many functioning Black Families functioning. But, this family is real, the first black family in the White House, the Obamas. President Barrack Obama was voted President in 2008, making history of the first black president and the first black family ever in the White House. Each time the Obamas are publicized, they are always smiling and working together. Their family is well off with two daughters and they have both of their parents together. Even though the Obama Family seem picture perfect it is clear that behind the lens they have issues, but the media tries their hardest to display that. Yet, continuing to try to break down somebody so powerful in a new face.


However African Americans did not always have the “Obamas” to represent them in
such a good aspect. As Dr. Noble said, “…people’s world-view is their picture of the way
Things in sheer actuality are, their concept of nature, of self, of society.” explaining that what you see is what you get theory. Other ethnicities outside of African-Americans believe that the way African Americans are represented in movies for example is the way every single African American behaves. Such as, all African American women are loud, offensive single mothers on welfare that they do not know who the father of their child(ren) are. And that the men are either thugs in the streets in gangs or incarcerated who does not take responsibility of his child(ren). That is not correct, because in actuality Black People are more than what we are perceived to be. The reality is that Blacks help build up America, by inventing so many unacknowledged things that we use every day. The media’s goal seems to be to destroy the reputation of African Americans, while they hide it in subliminal messages. Because, the media is very manipulative that you have to be very conscious of what they feed out.

The media does not act alone, it is sad to say that African Americans are unwarily and aware of spreading the exploitation disease. They are contributing by being apart of these depicting movies, TV shows, and video shows that tear down the view of African Americans. In Dr. Nobles book, understanding the Black Family, “Black family has been viewed as the white family’s ‘illegitimate soul brother’.” (37). Instead of working to create new roles, they choose to play in the few negative roles that are given. Besides sitting back and watching the movement of “Black faces entertaining” something should be done. Yet, I uphold the people standing up for righteousness such as Jet Magazine,
Ebony Magazine and black activist that promote Blacks to be seen in all aspects of life. The Media can be seen as another form of slavery towards African Americans. By chaining the brains of Blacks to live in a world of ignorance. Just like the school systems the media does not teach the history of Africans and how they came to be the African Americans today. The media rather create fools and deteriorate the face of Blacks faces to shame.

The media produces confusion of who African Americans are and other races prodominately Europeans do not understand. They constantly research the life of Blacks, but still will not understand that Black people might fall short, but stand strong. Black families biggest struggle is being lost as a people. It sad that everyday it is publicized as a reminder by the media in the news as we watch another young African American being killed by their own people. Once before African Americans were involuntarily were brought to America by the Europeans, traditional Africans were Kings and Queens united liked one big family. Yet you will not catch that as you turn to your channel 2, instead you can catch a couple arguing on Maury. It is clear as day light that African Americans families have lost sacred traditions of religion, family, unity, education, and respect they once fully upheld. As long as these negative views are not changed about African Americans. media will proceed on exploiting and glorifying the struggle of African Americans.

Black families have changed since the days of traditional Africa to now. Every day we have seen the outcome in the media of only the destructive view as a reminder the battle of African American s are having with themselves. The medias job is to spin
something positive around to something more negative to get more attention. There are people who feed into what they watch on TV about African Americans and run with it. Some people are not aware that black people have always been around to change who they are and to entertain. I feel that the media has done an excellent job on their goal.

Parallel Structure Essay

Penn 1
Treana Penn
English 201B M/W
May 25 2009


Pidd’s Ticket For Nonparallel Writing

Pidd has trouble maintaining parallel structure in his title. He writes, “Donna Rama: Guano Queen or Maker of Trouble” (1). The two noun phrases “Guano Queen” and “Maker of Trouble” lack parallel structure in the title. They are nonparallel, because they are different parts of speeches. Pidd first option to make the sentence parallel is to change the second noun phrase to an adjective phrase. The correct sentence will read “Donna Rama: Guano Queen or Trouble Maker?”

Pidd does not match up the verb phrases. He writes, “ Donna likes to read thick books with no pictures and expressing contrary views about hair-care products and revolutionary psychology” (1). The two verbs “likes to read” and “expressing contrary views” lack parallel structure. They are non parallel, because one verb phrase is infinitive and the other is a present participle. Pidd make the sentence parallel by changing both verb phrases into infinitive form. Pidd can also change the sentence by turning both verb phrases into present participle form. The correct sentence will read, “Donna likes to read thick books with no pictures and to express contrary views about hair care products”

Pidd’s noun phrases are nonparallel . He states, “but she is so pretty so people don’t mind listening most of the time.” (1). The two noun phrases that lack parallel structure are “she is so pretty” and “so people don’t mind listening most of the time.” They are nonparallel , because one is a noun phrase and one is a present particle phrase. He can change the sentence structure to both phrases into adjective noun phrases. Pidd can also make the sentence parallel by changing the sentence structure to both phrases into a present participle phrases. The correct sentence will read, “but she is pretty so people don’t mind listening to what she has to say most of the time.”

Pidd clauses lacks parallel structure. He states, “People balked; people gaped; cries were heard. The clause “cries were heard” lacks parallel structure. It is not parallel, because it is not clause that matches with the other clauses. He can change the verb phrase into an infinitive clause. The correct sentence will read, “People balked; people gaped; and people heard cries.”

Pidd’s essay contains more non-parallel noun phrases. He writes, “By giving up the crown, Donna would be giving up Lud’s scholarship money and adulation from the town.” (2). The two noun phrases lack parallel structure, “adulation from the town” and “Donna would be giving up Lud’s scholarship money”. Pidd has two options to correct the sentence he can either make the sentence all present participle or infinitive. The correct sentence will read, “By giving up the crown, By Donna giving up Lud’s scholarship money and by adulating the town.”

Pidd’s series of modifiers lack parallel structure. He writes, “A girl who was pretty, smart, and came from a low-income family just did not turn down the Bat Guano Queen crown.” The modifier “A girl who was pretty” lacks parallel structure. It is non-parallel, because it is not an adjective phrase unlike the other modifiers. Pidd can make the series parallel by making the last modifier parallel with the other modifiers. The correct sentence will read, “A girl was pretty, smart, and came from a low-income family just did not turn
down the Bat Gauno Queen Crown.”

Pidd has trouble making his subject complements parallel. He states, “It was funny: My pal Donna was mad for being good-looking while my cousin Willimina was feeling depressed for not being pretty enough.” (2). The subject compliment “My pal Donna was mad for being good looking” and “ my cousin Willimina was feeling depressed.”. They are non-parallel, because one phrase is present particle and the other phrase is an adjective phrase. By turning both phrases into present prepositional it will make the subjects complements parallel. The correct sentence will read, “ It was funny: My pal Donna was mad for being good-looking while my cousin Willimina was depressed for not being pretty enough.”

Pidd fails to make his last series of clauses parallel. The clauses that lack parallel structure, “ you can also buy Chinese” and “ if you can get a good deal at the BeauGus Superstore”. They are non parallel, because the sentence structure of phrases do not match. Pidd can make the clauses parallel, by making them all present participle. The correct sentence will read, “Buy American, buy a lot, and you can also buy Chinese, if you can get a good deal at the BeauGus Superstore.”